Name: Clara Shines
Race: Pōnix (Phoenix/Pony hybrid) Originally was a Pegasus
Story Type: AU
I'm submitting Clara for the YourOCSucks hybrids episode ^_^. I hope I make it in. (edit I didn't make it in /cry... j/k I really enjoyed making this character and I think I'll try to flesh her out more when I have some free time)
Clara was originally a pegasus who became fatally ill. Her older half sister, Moon Glimmer is a unicorn and couldn't bear the thought of her sister dying. So she worked feverishly to save her sister's life. After many failed attempts to cure her sister's sickness Moon Glimmer had felt defeated. She slid off her chair and began to sob. Just as she was about to give into her grief a flash of red caught her eye. There in the window sat Celestia's pet phoenix, Philomena. The mystical bird pruned her newly reborn feathers and then flew off, a single feather remaining behind. It was almost as if the bird had sensed Moon Glimmer's sorrow and gifted the feather to her.
"By Celestia's mane, that's it! I won't try to cure my sister's sickness I'll make it so that her body will be able to cure itself!"
Flushed with inspiration Moon Glimmer began to brew a potion from the phoenix's feather. Once the potion was finished she rushed off to her sister's side and bid her to drink as there was not much time left for the weakened Clara Shines. Once the potion was completely ingested Moon Glimmer began to cast a spell. A powerful spell. The magic within Moon Glimmer's body converged into her horn as she focused on her desire to see her sister live. Both the potion and the magic began to intermingle and the dying pegasus was lifted into the air. She let out a scream as fiery light shot out from her eyes and mouth. Moon Glimmer almost faltered as she herd her sister's cries of pain, but she regained her bearing and pressed on. Clara Shines then burst into ashes and all was quiet. Moon Glimmer collapsed panting on the floor, but when she saw the ashes she panicked and clambered over to where her sister's remains laid.
"Oh oh, WHAT HAVE I DONE?! My sister! She's gone! No...no."
Moon Glimmer stared in horror, but before she could even shed a tear a tremendous light erupted from the ashes! Hark! The pegasus lived and would live forever more! For she had become like the phoenix. Her once dusty pink coat was now a blazing red and her soft muzzle was replaced with a hard beak.
Moon Glimmer ended up losing her magical ability. The spell was so intense that it literally drained all of the magic from her body. Although, this effect may not be permanent she has yet to regain her magical abilities.
Also, you may notice that Clara's cutie mark has disappeared after she was transformed into a pōnix. This is because she was reborn. Clara's core traits will remain the same but her quirks and talents will change each time she is reborn, thus she will have to discover what her new talent is in order for her cutie mark to appear.
As for her original cutie mark (the makeup brush with 3 star burst), this represents Clara's talent in cosmetology. Clara was a makeup artist. She did a wide range of makeup from glamor makeup to theater makeup and enjoyed helping the mares of Ponyville to look and feel beautiful. She also used to volunteer at the local theater and do the performers' makeup.
After her rebirth Clara lost her ability to do extravagant makeup. She can still apply makeup regularly but her career as a makeup artist is over. Clara feels depressed not only because she lost her talent but also because her sister lost her magical ability. Every time Clara looks in the mirror she can't help but feel that she is to blame for her sister's loss. She never expresses these feelings to anypony else though.
Clara is kind of clumsy which she wasn't before her rebirth. Her large wings are often knocking over knickknacks and food is always falling out of her beak when she eats. This may be due to the fact that she is still getting used to her body... but it's been several months so this is probably a new quirk that came with her rebirth. These new habits concern her sister Moon Glimmer because Clara was always very composed and clean. However, Clara's cheerful and helpful personality is still very much alive within her. She often tries to find ways to help her friends as well as the townsponys and about 20% of the time things end up worse rather than better. While Clara does genuinely want to help she also has a few ulterior motives. She wants to find her purpose and regain her cutie mark as well as assure the other's that she's still the Clara they know and love.
For critique I have a question about Clara's original race. I have her as a pegasus because I thought that the transformation into a pōnix would be more smooth, but she didn't really use her wings that much when she was a pegasus. Do you think it would be better if I made her an earth pony originally?
Also, the outlines on my pōnix change colors a lot. I tried to simplify it by making the line one color, but it kind of looked weird, but do you think that I made her outline too many different colors? I'm mostly concerned with the neck.
Thank you and I hope you enjoyed my OC even if she does suck .