I'm not a video expert at all, but I find your work very inspiring so here is my two cent about the video trials:
- something went wrong when encoding the video. I watched it in 1080p and still found it very pixellised/blurry. Great loss of details in the process.
- Slow motion would have been just perfect. Maybe you're at 0.5x speed. A bit slower would have been better (if you shot in high framerate. Don't go below 30 fps)
- Some parts look very similar, kinda repetitive.
On the plus side, the model looks great and very sensual (That's what you where aiming for anyway).
The shades/lights play is really good.
The black and white is clean and well balanced (not too dark, not too much contrast, just right).
The music is enticing.
I made me think of this video from an photographer I find very talented: vimeo.com/16526827
keep up the good work!