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Anon371 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2018
Looks like she might be squishing Barry a bit there :XD:
Fedextreme Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2018  Student General Artist
amazing and really cute drawing nwn
it's really funny how someone like Barry does not sit still
  have to wake up Dawn XD
Andras63 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2018
The last few uploads have been very strong, overall.  If you practiced during your hiatus, it sure shows!

I like the lined watercolor look you went for.  It's soft and comfy with the colors and shading (especially the design on her hat!), yet the two are still sharp and recognizable.  I'd like to see more of this style, for sure.  That said, I have two nitpicks.  The first is merely mechanical: her hair and scarf don't seem to fall naturally into place, but rather seem a bit stiff.  I could see Dawn having split ends, but her scarf seems to hang off in either direction instead of draping over her upper body.  I like the zig-zag flow(?) they make together on the bottom-right, though.

I'm a little iffy on the other nitpick.  I'm not sure if it's because of the image compression, or that he's entirely in her shadow, but Lucas looks tattooed onto her cheek rather than trapped in her scarf.  In fact, when I first saw this on my phone, I thought she had some crumbs on her face.  I suppose there's only so much detail to put into a tiny character, but Hau and Red looked distinct in the last couple of pics.  Maybe it's the style.

That said, now that I can appreciate the cute scenario for what it is, I almost didn't include that criticism.  But, maybe there's something your artist's eye can discern about it that I can't articulate.
Zerinon Featured By Owner Edited Jun 11, 2018
Thank you for your feedback. I've used different methods for this artwork as opposed to past artworks. Fully digital on Clip Studio Paint as opposed to the old traditional to SAI method that I used to do. I might just stick to SAI for certain tools though but I guess I'll see how things will go in the future.

I guess I should have used stronger shading for Barry and around him now that you mention that. I did feel something was off with him, I thought that it was his overall pose though.

Thank you for your feedback!

Edit: Updated the drawing to make Barry stand out a bit more, hopefully that looks better.
Andras63 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2018
This fix definitely works.  Comparing it with the old one (good thing I saved it!), I can see your point.  The lack of shading didn't provide enough contrast between him and the cheek to make him feel like a separate object.  Now that there's some more shadow around him, it feels more like he's pushing into it.

By the way, I don't think I understand the title's joke.  Was Barry some kind of cop, or...?
Zerinon Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2018
That's good to hear, thanks again for your help.

In the anime and I think the games too, Barry had this running gag where he threatens to fine someone if they make him wait or something isn't going his way. I believe there is a compilation of it on Youtube.

I had this drawing in mind for Dawn and Lucas initially until I remembered Barry and thought this drawing would work better with him instead.
AlexAshley Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2018  Student
Creative and cute. Your ideas never disappoint, neither does the execution
Zerinon Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2018
Thank you very much, I appreciate that.
AlexAshley Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2018  Student
No problem. 
THEDAIBIJIN Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Cute to see them together~
Nice work! :)

ThatBigInkling Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2018
Aww, better hang on to Dawn's scarf XD
xWARZARDx Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Halothecool Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2018
Cute whens she sleeping😍
Cute drawing
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