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pilot comic

By Zaphkiellane
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I did this page as an experiment with the idea of turning parts of the story I'm working on with some of my OCs into a series of comic strip panels. Given the number of characters being used and the complexity of this story I don't think a comic would be the best outlet for this story however I'm going to throw a few of these out and see what kind of feedback they get. If nothing more they should be enjoyable for those of you who have taken an interest in my characters or want hints about the the story which has elements that have been shaped by some of the previous polls I posted.

Think of these like movie trailers to the actual narrative.


This first set of pages will be about a dinner party featuring Jake and Waratah visiting Thomas and D'arcy. The product is admittedly a bit rough but I'll give future products a cleaner presentation if these start to build interest. For now I'm just throwing this out to see how people will respond.
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JackofAllAss's avatar
Tell me... do you feel like Jake, but without the Waratah? 
JackofAllAss's avatar
Oh.
Tell me... do you... want a Waratah in your life?
Zaphkiellane's avatar
Not specifically, the whole theme behind J&W is that a meaningful relationship could be one you had never really imagined. 
LordoftheTroglodytes's avatar
well i for one would pay to read more comics like these, and definitely more of this short story :D
Zaphkiellane's avatar
I'll be doing more when I get back next weekend. 
druton's avatar
At least the world didn't explode.
Although, getting eaten is a kinda a worst-case already.
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Zaphkiellane's avatar
I take it that you approved. :)
JackofAllAss's avatar
Hah!  Jake imagines Thomas as a rubber hose cartoon character!

And, oh my gosh, the Clutch's actually have one of those old stick phones!  Well, pshaw!  I have a telegraph in my home!

I'm sure that Waratah is great with kids.
And wow!  Jake's got a frickin' watch phone!  Just like those secret agent men, in the movies!
Zaphkiellane's avatar
There is a phonograph and a claw foot tub someplace close by. 
LipsterLeo's avatar
Wonderful facial expressions. And the papa with the little one is adorable.  Clap Clap 
Zaphkiellane's avatar
Waratah and the baby interacting with be cute. 
FlapperFoxy's avatar
Too funny-great art as always!:D (Big Grin) 
Zaphkiellane's avatar
Thank'yah much!  :)
FlapperFoxy's avatar
You're welcome!Fox emoji - run 
Fondestbeef810's avatar
I feel like this can be a great comic! My only criticisms are that I feel like you should fix the speech bubbles and organize them better.
Zaphkiellane's avatar
I'll clean up the next ones this is mainly a check to see how much interest it gets. 
Fondestbeef810's avatar
Ok! Still, great job so far!
WanderingGoose's avatar
I think it would be fun to see more comics with your characters and their continued adventures. Now I'm curious about how the dinner will go!
Zaphkiellane's avatar
The idea that will be really fun is when they run into Jake's ex girlfriend Susan. 
WanderingGoose's avatar
Ooh yeah, Susan seems like a pretty hardcore/intense character so that should quite the meet up!
Andibi's avatar
"A bit rough" you say...  If my comics looked even a fraction as good, I could die happy :-)  It would be great to see more, as this is not only very well drawn, but engaging and funny.  Nice job.
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