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Nuzlocke Forum: A Roads Journey
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Sorry it's taken so long to get this page done guys, I've been focusing on commissions and such since I'm going on a 5 week vacation to America from 20th April!
If you want to help with what little funding I have left to do I still have cheap commissions available!
All character species are welcome! So if you want a reptile, furry, pony, human, whatever it is, I'll draw it!
Just please leave where you're from FurAffinity, Deviantart, Twitter or Tumblr, along with your name on those respective platforms as well as a reference picture of the character you want drawn within the Kofi Description.
And ooh I'm so happy the build up worked out!
I guess that would make things easier to remove memories when not being aware what is happening but when aware .... owy, that really looks hurtful for Jamie.
Yay for update but I hope next one will be nicer to your team : <
Glad I got the sense of how painful it is to have the memories ripped from your mind, I imagine it is NOT a pleasant experience at all.
And we shall see |D
Anyway, that's cool that you got a Porygon though. I've never seen one used in a nuzlocke. I hope they are a permanent member.
And Jamie being clairvoyant is really interesting. I was wondering why he was hearing the dead Pokemon talk. True creepiness right there.
And aaah that would have been cool but it wasn't the dead pokemon, basically what it was was the porygon calling out to Jamie, but Jamie's freaking the hell out because "THERE ARE DEAD POKEMON AND MUTILATED POKEMON OH MY GOD" and hearing a voice talking to him his minds playing tricks on him that they're talking to him, but he like 'snapped' to the realisation that someone else was in there when they shouted NO. Sorry that wasn't that clear.
The clairvoyant comment is hinting at...Something else. S'all I'm gonna say on that matter; seeing as how I'll explain it eventually!
Thank you though so much for the wonderful comment, I love reading long comments (or any comments really but long ones give me room to think about how I can improve on my comic and what you guys are thinking when reading it!)
I'm glad you liked the page though!
Oh, I see. I guess I just thought that was the case because the dialogue bubbles seemed different. But I can see how the different dialogue bubbles would be an effective way to show how Jamie's view of reality is being distorted due to him freaking out and being in such a situation. Very cool move there, even if I misinterpreted it. Actually, overall I think you've done a good job of portraying, visually, his anxieties and stressful situations. Oh, and I didn't mention it in my last comment, but I really like how it looks like Giovanni's face is literally torn from Jamie's memories in those last few panels. I think even though there have been times when reading your comic that some plot details/explanations escape me, you are overall REALLY good at portraying emotions, stress, and the effect of events on character's perceptions of the world around them.
Hmm, you have made me even more curious than I already am!
No problem at all! I appreciate long comments as well, so when I see something that was really impactful or well done, I like to be thorough in describing what I liked about it. I'm also glad to hear that my questions and criticisms aren't annoying. Like you, such things also help me think of ways to improve my own work.
Anyway, as always, I look forward to seeing what happens next!
This has helped me though come up with idea's for if anything like this happens again, I could have like the creepy dialogue and Porygon bubble merge together and meld them together to make it easier transition for readers to figure out!
But I'm so happy I managed to get the portrayal of his panic, fear an anxieties across! AND OH MY GOD YES!
Okay lil fact, I wanted it to appear like Giovanni's face was being ripped from his memories, but the way I initially drew it, it was scribbled over, which...Logically mean's you could restore those memories, where as with it being ripped and torn away, there's a greater chance of those memories never being restored, I mean they could be, cause the scraps of memory would be littering his mind somewhere, but it's harder to find the pieces again now. So I did a few experimentation on that scene to get it right, glad it came across how I wanted it too!
And man oh man that comment bout the portraying emotions part making me gush aaah, and I want to get better at making things clearer, but not, spoon fed y'know? So will keep practicing!
GOOD *Fuels the curiosity*
Same, I just struggle at times to articulate my thoughts so I rarely leave comments which sucks :c But I have a few test readers but since they know the basic over all plot, I can't tell if the stories easy to understand for new comers?
I think I need to write up the script for the next page, I have it drafted, definitely but I dunno if I wrote it up yet or not.
The ripping away of the memories is a lot more effective, and unique. I'm pretty sure I've seen the "scribbling over memories" effect somewhere, but the ripping away effect is so much more, I don't know, tangible? It's like you feel it.
I get what you mean. To be honest, I'm fine with not understanding 100% what is going on, since I assume things will be explained more clearly later. I'd rather there be a little bit of mystery and even confusion, than have the details spoon fed to me.
You could always have a test reader who doesn't know what is going to happen? Not that they are official beta readers or anything, but a few of my friends read my comic, and only one of them knows pretty much everything that is going to happen. So I can get feedback from the others who only really know what they've been reading if something came across clearly or not.
Good luck on the script and future pages!