MLP Thinking with Portals: Lamp Maintenance

Ok heres my first critique. so here we go:

First of all, i absolutely love the idea. ponies + portal = awesome. so for vision id say 4.5. as for originallity, 5. i havn't seen anything like this. technique, ive seen better (not from me i assure you) but ive seen ALOT worse (god only knows what ive seen). so for that, 4.
i'd like to also add that i like the way you didn't make the ponies talk. i mean, it would have been cool but you couldnt find the right voice or god forbid voice yourself (iveseenbadthings)
Overall, 4.5 outta 5.

My 3rd critique of your hilarious pony portal animations.

It was great how it had a proper introduction to the situation and how it showed what the problem was before it was trying to be solved with the actual theme you put in. I read the other critiques and <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/x/x/x…" alt="" title="xXStorefrontXx"/> made a good point where Applejack was a little fat but it was only in 2 little scenes where I noticed she was a little chubby, when Applejack walks to Applebloom after she enters the barn and when she pushes the picture of the jar away that Applebloom took out.

But the strange thing is why did she need that jar anyway when all she needed was the portal gun? Unless I'm missing something here (I probably am) the jar was pointless. It was totally unexpected that she jumped into the portals, I thought she would put her hoof in and grab the lamp from there.

The impact of the fall was unexpected also cause Applebloom shot another portal in the progress of that fast falling which caused Applejack to be launched away. The final things are how was Luna able to use the portal with only one portal used from the portal gun and how was she able to be inside the moon considering only one portal was shot.

Regardless, it was funny and a proper intro was made and that's all that matters to me. <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/c/l/c…" alt="" title="clapplz"/>

i loved how that only there actions toled the story that was amazing!!!!

it wasnt original in characters but i gave you the stars for apple bloom's port whole
the technique was amazing at the start with click to begin
i have no idea what impact is but it was good lol<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/> I love mlp fim <3 its not enough sooooo wgub;zourbfuwr gbrogbuwr;gowrugvworvguwrovgwuorvgwouavuwutervguegrgiuerigvereivger erutgeurgtu ruetg ur eru e eurgtie g g g g g g g gg g g gg g g g g g g g gg g g g g g g g g g g g gg g g g g g g g g g g

This animation is hilarious, because it's made me laugh like a hyena LOL!!!

Big Mac and Applejack are trying to remove a broken light bulb from the ceiling, but failed. Abblebloom had to help them via portals and by using it for fun, she had a massive fall via portals and sent Applejack to the moon; I love how Princess Luna came in <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/>

I haven't played any Portal games before, but I saw fanart pictures and stuff based on them...

By the way, Valentine's Day is nearby and we're ready to spread some love, because I'm ready to find someone as a partner <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/>

I love this series, but one thing bothered me about this particular installment Apple Jack is a little....fat...<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a…" width="19" height="19" alt="" title="Sweating a little..."/> especially the part where she is pointing up at the light and there is that kinda front angle view.

Apart from that the only other thing I can say is that your Ponies are a little rough around the edges in places. Apple Jack's Flank for example when she is in the moon, comes to a small point in the back instead of a rounded surface. This can be seen in small areas through out the animations, you just need to smooth out your Ponies, and give them curves consistently throughout the body line...also I think Big Mac is supposed to have freckles too..

Please Keep this series going though XD its Hilarious

Okay, being an animator myself... I could say this is very well done!

Congratulations! Also, being the animator of ERR. I'm quite busy so I declined their offer but it's fine.

Now, for some constructive criticism.
Vision of FULL STARS! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/>
You got your result and got what you wanted. Nice work, really. Nothing else I could say here.

3 Star Originality <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/>
Well, on this one... I had to give a three. It was funny and all but I think of how would Applebloom aim and survive the landing. Still it's cartoons so it's fine. On the other hand, Luna on the moon... Reminds me of this line... "SO MANY FRIENDS"
I think it got overused or something.

Technically speaking<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/>
It's good all and all but you really have to re-vector those mouths. It looks to sharp on this situation. On the other hand, try preventing some errors like her arm going to her head or the outline of the arm getting out of the body. Make sure that it looks like really attached to her arm. Check out =Ganton3. Try asking tips from him, he's a good animator.

Good for Webisodes<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt="" title="Star!"/>
Well, congrats! You earn yourself a good start! Enough even start a webisode. Keep practicing and I'm sure you'll be as fast in animating as those studio animators, including me! (But I'm off my work right now since I haven't got called.)

Well done and congrats! Anyways, good luck improving! ^^

<img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/j/o/j…" alt="" title="johnkapid"/>=johnkapid
A friendly good critic for animators who are still beginning to start!

DON'T READ THIS. YOU WILL BE KISSED ON THE BEST DAY OF YOUR LIFE. NOW THAT YOU'VE STARTED READING, DON'T STOP. THIS IS SO FREAKY. 
1)Say your name 10 times 
2)Say your mom's name 5 times 
3)Say your crush's name 3 times
4)Paste this onto 4 other games
If you do this, your crush will kiss you on the nearest Friday possible. But if you don't paste this, you will get bad luck. SEND THIS ON 5 DIFFERENT GAMES IN 143 MINUTES. WHEN YOUR DONE, PRESS F6 AND YOUR CRUSHES NAME WILL APPEAR IN BIG LETTERS. THIS IS SO FREAKY IT ACTUALLY WORKS

*AJ is launched off*
AJ : SPAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACE!

Good ol' Applebloom! ^_^

cave johnson aprove.

Omg

I want a portal gun o-o I'd make myself fly and go infinitely between portals like in Best Sisters play portal xD

I thought I would see Wheatley and Space Core for a second! XD

SPAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACE!

danng apple jack got fat

hahaha, the sims music theme xD