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Rhyming is Easy
Rhyming is easy
But poetry leaves doubts
"Are these the best rhymes
That I could spit out?"
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Literature
I Am My Own Sorrow
I built my own cell
And locked myself within
Threw the key away
To the monster within
Doomed to feel failure
Regardless of success
Even when I'm done
I'm never gonna rest
Dealt a bad hand
Then built a prison for myself
My happiness unused
Forever dusted on a shelf
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Literature
Shall I Compare Thee to a Summer's Day
Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
When it's 30°C and it's 80% humidity
And the electricity bill aggravated by the AC
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Literature
The Weaver
Beyond what a mortal's prayer can reach
Beyond even a god's beseech
Lies one so vast so great
The whole world did it create
The weaver of fates such as it
Has no other equivalent
Even the gods to it bow down
To it alone belongs the crown
So if at something you are stuck
You're better off pleading Lady Luck
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Literature
Creator's Insecurities
Is it good or is it bad
This inspirations that I had
Is it good or is it not
This poem that my head has wrought
Should it go to gallery or to scraps I wonder
This thing that I wrote and no other
Omg I clicked submit
Will it be a bust, or, as I hope, a hit?
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Literature
Lady Luck
Lady Luck I silently
Wish to invoke upon me
The blessings of gracious thee
To invoke lady luck
Three times three the bell must be struck
First three invoke the King of Fools
To bend and and break plans and rules
The expected toll of the next three
Summons the King of Beggars upon me
Now to invoke Lady Luck
The final three must be struck
Lady Luck I silently
Wish to invoke gracious thee's
Sacred blessing upon me
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Literature
Buying Groceries
רוטב צ'ילי פה מוציא לי
אפזר על הבשר
את הפוקצ'ה על המצה
אוכל כבר מחר
פסטה, פסטה
זה טוב עם קצת סלט
את המצה אוכל על המחבט
קונה פה לי, קונה פה לך
קונה פה לי, קונה פה לך
פומפיה קטנה קונה פ&
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Literature
King of Fools
A rascal I am upon the thrown
A crown rests on my sacred dome
All the scoundrels hail to me
I give my blessings on to thee
So fickle I am, like Lady Luck
One moment a beam, another, a cruck
To invite me call me thrice
Beware my blessings' hidden price
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Literature
Reading in a Storm
Drip. Drop
Drip. Drop
I'm watching the rain while reading a book
While I turn the pages out the window I look
Drip. Drop
Drip. Drop
A thunder is rolling. Is it far or near?
I can't see the lightning and that is clear
Drip. Drop
Drip. Drop
The sky is stormy, but that is OK
Because I'm finally at peace in this piece of grey.
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Literature
Snork a Dork
I have a dork
I like to snork dorks
Do you like to snork a dork?
You should try
You should find your own dork to snork
You can take my dork
Take him, so you can try and snork
At least one dork
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Literature
To Remember When All Is Lost
When you lose all your hope
When everything is forever lost
When you don't think things will be OK
When your out of luck
Even if it's only a kiss or a hug
I'll be here for you
Even if all I can do is listen
Or give an advice for you
Don't lose your faith, my friend,
Because I'm here for you
I'll be here all day
Even if you don't know what to do
Don't lose your faith, my friend,
You have someone who cares
Even if all is lost
I'll still care for you
So don't lose your faith my friend
Because even if it's a shot in the dark
Things just might improve for you
Even by some small bit of luck
Through fire thick or thin,
I will be your companion
We will both ride into battle
On a great trusty stallion
So don't lose your faith, my friend,
For you have someone who cares
Even if all is lost
I will still love you
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Literature
I Was Forced to Write a Limerick Part 2
אולצתי לכתוב חמשיר
אז כתבתי משהו כביר
אך לצערי לא היה
אף יצור שנברא
שידע להעריך ת'חמשיר
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Literature
I Was Forced to Write a Limerick Part 1
אולצתי לכתוב חמשיר
אז יצאתי והלכתי לעיר
ושם לא היה
אף יצור שנברא
שידע לכתוב משהו כשיר
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Literature
Roses are Green
Roses are green
Violets are brown
I didn't sleep much
I feel upside-down
Ashes to ashes
Chin to Chin
I do not like
That feeling within
Something grows
Something inside
And all I am searching
Is for a place to hide
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Literature
One, Two, Three, Four, Five
One, two, three, four, five,
I have to pass this test alive,
Six, seven, eight, nine, ten,
I have to do this test again.
Why does he have to go?
Because his score was only so.
What score did he get?
A failing one you can bet.
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Literature
Need of a Hero
In a world where people suffer from a
Ravaging magical disease
The many have to suffer from the
Yoke of the few who do as they please
Who will be our shining star
Guiding us to a better future from afar?
Like the bright Heroes of old
Bringing Warmth and Light
To a place of Darkness and Cold
Will we have a Hero once again?
Who will bring our suffering to an end
When everything is Dark and Cold
Who will shine bright like the Heroes of old?
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Rhyming is easy
But poetry leaves doubts
"Are these the best rhymes
That I could spit out?"
Rhyming is Easy
Rhyming is easy. At least easier than people might think. Poetry is more complex, since there's the matter of beat, which syllables are emphasized, what are the rhymes (if any), length of lines, and many other things.
I don't know if poetry is complicated, but it's definitely more complex than rhyming.

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I built my own cell
And locked myself within
Threw the key away
To the monster within

Doomed to feel failure
Regardless of success
Even when I'm done
I'm never gonna rest

Dealt a bad hand
Then built a prison for myself
My happiness unused
Forever dusted on a shelf
I Am My Own Sorrow
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Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
When it's 30°C and it's 80% humidity
And the electricity bill aggravated by the AC
Shall I Compare Thee to a Summer's Day
When Shakespeare wrote that line he didn't live where I live. So I decided to poke a little fun at it.
Jokes aside, he was a brilliant playwrite. And he had more dirty jokes in his plays than you'd think. He did write his plays for people after all.

The license above is the binding license! NOT the default DA license! If and when DA offers CC-BY 4.0 as a license, this link will be removed and the license will be updated below. Until then, the binding license is the one above.
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Beyond what a mortal's prayer can reach
Beyond even a god's beseech
Lies one so vast so great
The whole world did it create
The weaver of fates such as it
Has no other equivalent
Even the gods to it bow down
To it alone belongs the crown
So if at something you are stuck
You're better off pleading Lady Luck
The Weaver
Description:
It is the Weaver. It is the only title it has, both colloquially, and in religious circles. It is the weaver of fate. It is the patron of non, and practically no one worship it.

Character Explanation:
The Weaver is not worshiped because it doesn't answer prayers, and even the pleads of gods fall on deaf ears. Being such an unapproachable being, it is not worshiped, and is mostly ignored. Almost nothing is known about it, and non has seen it, save, perhaps, for the Lady of Fate (hence the pronoun it). The only sign that it exists is some sort of causality, or primal principle (and indeed, it has been termed the Primal Principle) that cannot be changed, cannot be reached, and of which nothing is known about. It is not known what is the nature of the connection the Primal Principle and the Weaver have, but from the way the Lady acts, it is clear that there is some connection between the two. There are many speculations, non of which is closer to the truth than the other.
According to the Lady of Fate herself, while she decides how things transpire, the Weaver decided what transpires. And that when it "weaves the strands of Fate" as mortals say, it leaves room enough for the Lady to decide upon the finer details. She herself will not, or perhaps cannot, divulge further information, and all inquiries regarding either the Primal Principle, or the Weaver, fail.

Since I didn't wrote it for any particular story or world, it can be comfortably inserted into any fantasy world (or any other) as a deity, a spirit, or whatever you see fit.

King of Fools
Lady Luck

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SUOMAR Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the watch!
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Xender1500 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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TheFlawedOne Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the fave friend!
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Xender1500 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!
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Silka-MLFT Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks you so much for the watch! :heart: :meow:
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Xender1500 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :D
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paytonsnewheart Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the llama!
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Xender1500 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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Tigers-stock Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2018
Here's a llama
There's a llama
And another little llama
Drama llama
Calmer llama
Farmer llama
Duck!

Thx for the llama :D
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Xender1500 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D
I didn't know someone else knew this song XD
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