apocathary's Workshop: Results

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apocathary's Workshop: Results

February 17, 2008

A word from Writers-Workshop: This workshop proved to be a bit of challenge for our writers, or at least that's how we choose to interpret receiving just 8 entries for a workshop. In a way, we're a little happy about it, because it means we've reached another level. This cycle intends to be a little more difficult than the others. But please don't be daunted!

The writers who did send us work showed a lot of promise. Great work!

Thank you to apocathary for being a wonderful workshop host, answering our participants' questions whenever necessary, critiquing all the pieces, and for introducing us all to something new and fantastic in literature. :heart:

You can read all the entries here.

:star: Special Mention: All of our participants read and critiqued the other entries; we're very proud of this; but we'd like to welcome livingtoxic who is new to our workshop, but plunged right into the writing and critiquing/commenting. Welcome to our group!

apocathary's Top Picks

(in reverse alphabetical order of writer's username)

:star: Lovestory by neurotype-on-discord

Excerpt from critique: "... you've chosen a pretty suitable icon; Barbie is known all over the world and the notion of her speaking up is a slightly creepy one, even if a million girls all over the world have wished it at one time or another.

"I would have liked to have seen Barbie play more of an active part in putting him in the unstable state that lead to his death, being that she appears to be just a result of his madness, rather than a major cause. But in her capacity as a facilitator, she plays the part well, so no complaints there. [...] The word choice is consistent throughout, and I particularly enjoyed the last paragraph or so, where he is sinking under the throes of winter." Read the rest here.

:star: The Borgory Nine by fense

Excerpt from critique: "I think you've come pretty much the closest to the spirit of MR of those that entered.[...] I don't have too much to crit on the story itself, you've obviously got a pretty good grasp of the basics, and your idea has been developed enough to be valid. [...] Alright, thank you very much for the enjoyable read, you should be proud of producing this in the time constraints." Read the rest here.

:star: The Hawk in Tweed by batousaijin

Excerpt from critique: "To be honest, I don't think you've quite hit the nail on the head when it comes to producing a piece that could be considered magic realism. But hell if I care, because what you have produced is a fine example of how to use an introspective point of view to solidify a character in the reader's mind.

"I'm immediately reminded of Sufjan Stevens' song Come On! Feel The Illinoise!: The World's Columbian Exposition / Carl Sandburg Visits Me In A Dream in which the singer is visited by Carl Sandburg and asked to consider whether he is 'writing from the heart'. You've used Ted Hughes in a similar manner, as an interrogator to the protagonist's actions and feelings." Read the rest here.

apocathary critiqued all of the entries:

Critique of The magic of Mario and the chess park at 5pm by livingtoxic
Critique of Broadcase From Neptune 1 by kittyfantastic24
Critique of Alarm Clock by inspiredimperfection
Critique of Chuck by EvenAfterTwelve
Critique of Peep and Marry by Bunnygirle26


Writers-Workshop would like to mention that xCamix's prose piece Remembering Hazel (submitted to BeccaJS's workshop, What is in a name?) received a Daily Deviation on February 6, 2008.

Congratulations, everyone! Look out for our news article and journal with EveningDownpour's prose workshop on non-fiction poetry.

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Erinamis's avatar
I wasn't able to take a look at all submissions but I'm definitely bookmarking them so I can critique in a near future :)

Congratulations to all participants! This was a difficult challenge and you managed to work around it quite well :aww: