MSJames's Workshop: Results

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MSJames's Workshop: Results


April 20, 2008

A word from Writers-Workshop: We were very pleased with the way this turned out: 23 entries to a form that most of you were unfamiliar with. Wonderful work! MSJames -- thank you so much for being part of this, and for critiquing every entry. :heart:

:star: Special Mention: There was a lot of commenting and critiquing going on this time -- yet another feat to be proud of. I would like to mention Gibah who seems to have commented on most, if not all, entries. Good going! We hope enjoyed this workshop.

MSJames's Comments

Well I can say that I was pleasantly surprised that the Tanka workshop was such a great success! With 23 entries, I was overwhelmed with great poetry! I do apologize to those who received vague comments on their deviations, I have been very busy as of late, but that is still no excuse, so I offer you this, if you were not satisfied with the crit/comment you received, please note me and I will do all I can to help you.

Okay, now on to my comments…

Well, about half of the participants I think got the form of the Tanka poem, but some of the other entries seemed to be just looking at syllable and line count and what not. The main emphasis in any Japanese poetic form is brevity and concrete imagery and more than a few of the poems I read, while being very poetic and good in their own right, missed the mark of the Tanka completely.

For those of you to whom I remarked that you're Tanka lacked this or that, please re-read the links in the original workshop thread. I know it's a lot to swallow, but if you seriously want to improve this form, they are an invaluable tool to help!

Okay, enough of my ramblings, but before I end this, I do want to solemnly thank all of you who took the challenge and dove in head first to this. Learning a new poetic form, especially one with so many rules and minute details is very difficult and I do thank you all for rising to the challenge!

Okay, here are my top picks for this workshop:

Clear Moonlight by GaioumonBatou
A British Tanka by BeccaJS
Unfunny Play by AstarteKatz
5 by inspiredimperfection
A conversation between lovers by infrangiblegreen
Playtime by Gibah
Mistress by darksouldream

And here is the best example I found in all the submissions. Even though these are some of this deviants first Tanka, they are excellent examples of how I believe the form of Tanka should be written:

:star: Tanka Attempts by Bogbrush

Lastly, I would like thank Writers-Workshop for allowing me to share my love for this form with all the deviant writers out there and I do hope you all enjoyed learning and growing with me!
Laters all and don't forget that Laurence55  is holding  month long learning exercise in the Tanka form, so please check that out!

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Congratulations, everyone! Look out for our news article and journal with Jon-Law's free-for-all workshop on humour.

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This was a hard workshop and the results showed, I believe, the dedication that the members of this club have to trying out new forms of poetry. Can't wait to get started on Jon-Laws' workshop!