A Journal In Threes
Here's a break from my normal journals, to give something back for once. I've recently got involved with #litlove
, and have met several uh-mazing new people, so here they are, all jumbled up with other people / deviations you really should check out.
Plus, there's stuff in it for you: if you give a critique on any two items in this journal, I will make you a little graphic proclaiming how awesome you are, and also critique any piece in your gallery. Three Pieces to Salivate Over
Three pieces that have made my jaw literally drop this week. Properly drop on to the floor and start picking up lint and things - it's really very unhealthy, but these pieces are completely worth it.
] [Language of Spring Cleaning]tetemeko.deviantart.com/art/La…
Quote: "I wanted to sweep away the disappointment on her tongue."
I thought this was absolutely uh-mazing. If you like metaphors, word-plays and the soft sibilance of an envelope of words rising out and enfolding you, then this deviation is for you. It's short, but sweet: and leaves you thinking for the rest of the day about where words go when you've forgotten about them - I've always thought they behaved rather like odd socks, but tetemeko
puts a whole new spin on it.
] [this is real]vgaer.deviantart.com/art/this-…
Quote: "terrified of unconsciousness
i stay awake."
Something we can all sympathise with: a lack of sleep. As I type this, I haven't slept in 48 hours, and I'm geting dangerously dependent on coffee. However nasty that is, this deviation is beautiful in both structure and content: check it out.
There's some beautiful alliteration and imagery in there.
] [Well-worn Wings]twilightlavender.deviantart.co…
Quote: "Breaking ties from what was sworn
Our fledglings fall, their souls reborn."
This poem is absolutely gorgeous, and a rare breed of poem, where the structure is very fixed and there's a definite rhyme scheme, but the poem scans well and doesn't seem forced. What an achievement.
Plus all the absolutely gorgeous imagery and the feelings of euphoria evoked...what a deviation. Three Pieces to Critique
These aren't pieces that are rubbish - far from it! These are just bits and bobs that have been brought to my attention over the last few days, and I'm sure the artists would be very grateful if you offered a few words of advice, or shared your opinion, or pointed out what was really good in their poem and offered some encouragement. Although I've already critiqued these poems, unfortunately, I am not always right and what I think could be improved could be your definition of perfect poetry! So go on. Challenge me.
Quote: "Vanilla lingering
Revered and admired
Her taste upon my tongue."
This is darkestpoetrylover
's first stab at poetry, and it's a wonderful attempt! With a bit of editing and rescanning and rephrasing, this could be a gorgeous piece of poetry, it just needs a little guidance.
I haven't critiqued it yet but it's on my list, but if anyone wants to beat me to it and do one before I do, they are very welcome. xD
] [empty space]ruffienne.deviantart.com/art/e…
Quote: "youre a diamond, and
youve been squeezed from the earth
and you dont know what electrons are."
It was hard picking out a phrase to quote for this one, because I equally love the phrase "what else is there? The tungsten. The dark." Spooky. If you're into poetry that makes you think, or metaphors that connect seemingly complex ideas in the most simple of ways, have a look at this deviation. It's definitely a good read! At the same time though, it could be improved so keep an eye out.
If you fancy your name going in this last slot, send a note with a link to your deviation. xDThree People to LovePoetryOD
- This talented deviant is someone I've just come across, but her involvement in the community has left me flabbergasted. mistress of #litlove
, this lady works tirelessly for the community, and the amount of love she gets is in no way equal to the amount of effort she puts in. So go show her some love. GaioumonBatou
- not only does this deviant have a wonderfully varied gallery, full of musings and beatifully articulated poetry, they're also a very active member of the community, and supports the gallery directors a ridiculous amounts. So go drop a note or a comment. Or else. ARIrish2
- (suggested and written by ObliqueWordsmith
) "fm-vorassi, besides being deliciously creative, is also quietly supportive and helpful, whilst never yurping into your face. He guides critiques with a deft hand and an eye for encouragement, skill and authorial intent. He's exceedingly valued." Three Clubs / Contests to SupportWriters-Slam
- One of the most interesting projects I've seen, and the most original. Something that I'm planning on getting involved with soon, so why don't you?
the art of conversation contest: vgaer
is hosting a pretty cool competition, and I'll admit I'm biased towards this one because I'm providing prizes for it. It's just clicked that that means I can't enter, which means that I have to somehow coerce other people into doing it...at least go check it out. DailyDeviants
- A lovely project featuring unknown artists from all corners of deviantART. If you're not already watching them, watch them, because there are some real gems there.