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I don't believe in 'always'

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"you flinched," he says, a space
where lips had been before.
no longer touching, we remain
silent.
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Full title: "I don't believe in 'always' any more."

This is based off a sketch I scribbled down in Chemistry today, which is half a page of very bad prose.
I managed to condense it into four lines of very bad poetry.

Definitely making progress, here. xD
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paint by numbers and my writers block are having sex again. i can't do anything creative on my own anymore. we are scattered snapshots, disorganized, not in order, and i'm my own "out of order" sign on a bathroom stall door in a public washroom. my clavicles won't let go of my ankles. i sleep in diagonals and wake up with "i-slept-all-wrong" and "i-have-a-stiffness- in-my-neck-and-a-crick-in-my-back." i had intercourse with purity, i used dirt as laundry detergent, i slept with insomnia as my pillow, and this morning i ate my hygiene in the shower. tan lines were typewritten on my cheeks when i wore your ugly fingers. you
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You have cataloged your scars like your body is a library- to be read through & learned from. You think of all the little boys whose greedy fingers graced your pages. You are angry- none cared for you properly: folding creasing & breaking your spine. They left you on a shelf to gather dust. & why should you ever forget that?
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ejectionletter's avatar
i don't believe in it either.
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wonderfulrachel's avatar
it's just a word.


...thanks for the fave, love. :)
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Peter-T-D-Walker's avatar
I adore the fact that it's only four lines long, but tells such a huge story.
In all honesty, based off this, I'd read a novel length version, but I don't think it needs anything else. There is perfection to be found in simplicity.
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wonderfulrachel's avatar
thankyou so much for such a lovely comment. :)

seriously.
thankyou.



-blush-
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Peter-T-D-Walker's avatar
Aawh, that's okay :hug:
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Carousel-Dreams's avatar
whenever you should feel like it you should elaborate on this, sounds like a fantastic beginning of a short story.
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wonderfulrachel's avatar
it was originally a short story...I'm still tweaking it. xD as in, rewriting and rewriting because it's not going right. D:

We'll see.


:)
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Carousel-Dreams's avatar
i am sure it will all pan out well, i look forward to reading it
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evcfenix's avatar
i dont think this is shabby at all. perfectly says what it has to say, with an opening line thats engaging. the silence can be heard.
:thumbsup:
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wonderfulrachel's avatar
thankyou very much, sweetie. :)
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evcfenix's avatar
ur welcome :)
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poshlost|Hobbyist Writer
Eh, you could do better.
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wonderfulrachel's avatar
i was going to upload it to scraps. but i thought "fuck it, nobody watches my scraps anyway."

>.<
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Wildbluesun's avatar
Oh, but this is brilliant. Really made me think; the brevity is perfectly placed. Having to stop and re-read for the sense to come through works so well with the length.
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wonderfulrachel's avatar
oh, thankyou! :)

that really made my day. seriously. :) comments like that - where people have actually thought about the poem - well. just the fact you've thought about my poem, really.
that's enough.

-smile-
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Wildbluesun's avatar
:) Thanks. Knowing that someone really liked my comment makes me smile.

Seriously, I have a huge grin on my face right now.
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