Hey NC, as I mentioned on Discord, I feel fairly unqualified to write a critique as I can barely assemble a drawing myself. However, your request called to me, and I feel like I can deliver thoughtful remarks despite my own lack of experience. On the vision front, you did a fantastic job. Much like Ms. Sparkle, I’m immersed in the world. I don’t even have to go through your description to feel the vibe of this art. There is some conflict. There are big ponies, or tiny submarines, and they come together in a curious seascape that captures the murky colors of the unknown as well as the bright sunshine of optimism.
Originality in this context is a bit hard for me to evaluate given the multiple threads of inspiration that are coming together to make this piece, so I think I’ll largely leave that alone and move on to technique and impact. The way you drew Twilight is simply stunning. I can feel the weight of her uniform through my imagination. If I sit and stare at this piece long enough, I can sense that texture. That doesn’t happen through luck. That happens through talent, and you’ve got it. My one criticism on this front, if you even want to call it that, is that I, personally, find the dichotomy between the mane/tail and skirt underwater mechanics to be a little odd. Twilight’s mane is very flowy. The contours are smooth and whimsical, producing a floating type atmosphere. The skirt, conversely, has some very hard edges to it that stood out from the whimsical counterpart. Of course, this prodded me to look at some references, and hard juts and whatnot are completely possible. I’m not casting this as either a right or wrong, but it might be worth thinking about in the future.
To me, the impact is solidified by four features. The color contrast between the murky ocean and the light shining on Twilight pops. Twilight’s eyes are stupendously drawn. The details in the uniform generate a texture that lingers in my imagination, and finally, the little extra details put into the submarine buddies give it a boost. You did a great job! Keep it up!