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Muslim Manga Month 4 - Page5

By Wilpan
Submit for MMM contest in :iconmuslim-manga: month 4
Really bad in English dialogue, need more critique

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Tittle : Ima
Episode : Hijab
Page : 5 of 8

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Page1 : [link]
Page2 : [link]
Page3 : [link]
Page4 : [link]
Page5 : [link]
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Page8 : [link]
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Lianthanis's avatar
Here you could also say:

"Since last time" or "In comparison to last time"

and

"Really - like how?" or "Really - how do I look different?"

"Oh, it's about my hijab right" or "Oh, because of my hijab right"

"But why that sad look on your face?" or "Why do you look sad?"

And you should say "Maybe I can help you". 'May' alone just doesn't work.

"Yes, but whatever your problem is, I will try to help you, just tell me."

Just a suggestion, though :)
Wilpan's avatar
you're great english teacher..!!
:omg: hope i can study english structure with you :hug:
Lianthanis's avatar
Oh, thank you :) Of course you can, so if you have questions, please feel free to ask me any time - but I don't know much about teaching though ;)
Wilpan's avatar
haha.. don;t be so poor,
you're great english teacher :D
Lianthanis's avatar
Oh well ... thank you :)
But I really don't know ... of course I can suggest things, but I'm not sure that this makes me a teacher.

However, please ask me anytime if you have questions ... even if it has nothing to do with DA ;)
Wilpan's avatar
it's fine, haha~
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