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Fountain Pens

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I feel empty and depleted.
I am drained and so defeated.
I have nothing left.
It seems my heart wasn't enough.
Days are years with little sleeping
You say my character is steeping.
I have bled to fill
Your fountain pens. Dissect me again.

I'm burning out.
Back away.
I need space.
I need oxygen.
If you want the truth
Then start listening,
Because I can't scream much louder.

You have asked too much
And I'm drying up.
I'm reduced to embers.
But if you would just leave
Me room to breathe,
Then maybe I could recover.

I'm burning out.
Back away.
I need space.
I need oxygen.
If you want the truth
Then start listening,
Because I can't scream much louder.

You have held me down,
But I'm gaining ground.
You can't hold on forever.
I know you have your doubts,
But if you'd hear me out,
We could fight this war together.

I'm burning out.
Back away.
I need space.
I need oxygen.
If you want the truth
Then start listening,
Because I can't scream much louder.
This is my 4th poem, assuming I am counting correctly, for NaPoWriMo2015. This is actually the work of multiple days, so I am half-tempted to count this as multiple poems because it's so much longer than what I normally write, but that seems like cheating.
:iconsighingplz: I'm not sure if I'm totally happy with this. I wrote it with the intention of it being lyrics (I basically recorded myself free-singing, and then organized it into more cohesive lyrics.) The only problem with lyric writing vs. poetry writing for me is that for some reason, when I try to write lyrics, it's like my brain just goes back to middle school, and I have no word skills because I'm too focused on having relatively regular meter and rhyme, and a melody that sounds okayish. And then I'm left with meh lyrics, meh music, and meh feels. Meh. Lyric writing always reminds me of how much I love free verse, which in my opinion, is so much more organic. I'll probably go back and edit it later. The only part of it that I'm REALLY happy with is the second half or so of the first stanza. I did vary a little from the current lyric formula though (Verse 1, Chorus, Verse 2, Chorus, Bridge, Chorus, Chorus). I ended up with something like Verse A, Chorus, Verse B1, Chorus, Verse B2, Chorus. WHATEVER. Maybe someday I can get this workable enough to actually record. Or something. I don't know. Things.
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Can relate to this... :rose: