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Let the Fall Make You Stronger.

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Published: April 27, 2014
"Hey! Are you all right?"

"Sure, why wouldn't I be?"

"Um...because you just fell from the roof of the hou-"

"See, that's where you're wrong. I didn't fall. The floor challenged me and I accepted."

"And how did that go for you?"

"The floor won. But only because it had the advantage."

"Of being non sentient and vast in size, along with the fact that there is a freaking storm out!!"

"Nope. I just attacked from the wrong position."

"Backwards?"

"I overestimated my skills."

"I'll say. You're bleeding!"

"Only a little. Ask me again."

"What?"

"If I'm fine."

"Are you?"

"Nope."

"Is it because you're bleeding?"

"You're supposed to ask 'Why'."

"God, you're so bloody difficult!"

"But cute. Just ask."

"Oh for-Why?"

"Because this world we live in, it gives us these dreams, you see. These great big beautiful colourful galaxies in our heads of ideas, thoughts and empathetic conclusions to our fellow humans. Our brain tells us, go on, be curious, make those mistakes. Make big, small, tiny, angry, happy, playful, experimental, challenging, beautiful mistakes and the world will reward you with answers, knowledge, and all the beauty it has to offer. But..."

"But what?"

"No one really prepares us for the heartbreak it all brings with it. No one ever tells us that the world will greedily take the good in us, our dreams, and spit us out, soulless, but still alive...and then it blames us for watching all our beautiful dreams die."

"..."

"What? Say something?"

"Why were you out on the roof today."

"I was looking up at the sky."

"During a storm?"

"I just like knowing it is not just me. I just like knowing that even the skies scream, with the weight of all our lost, forgotten, broken little dreams..."
© 2014 - 2019 UntamedUnwanted
It has been a long time since I wrote a conversational piece. And then I had an epiphany on the way down between a rooftop and the ground. I except if this was a conversation in real life, it would end with "I think you need medical attention now." which is decidedly less romantic, and doesn't make the best of stories. Sentences have been made prettier with artistic license alone. ;)

I'm fine, by the way. :P
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zippo5767's avatar
zippo5767Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic.
joy97's avatar
I almost cried...

So truthful. <3
Germanyfan123321's avatar
Wow it's nothing like I've ever seen before…it really gets the gears in my brain working…
ThexSilverxWolf's avatar
Man this one makes you think.
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ME-v2Hobbyist Writer
I  like it. Very dramatic, thought-provoking.
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circumsolemHobbyist General Artist
beautiful piece, I really enjoyed it!! :)
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MrMacAilaHobbyist Writer
This is aweeesomee!
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Love it.Heart Love
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Cezille07Hobbyist General Artist
Goosebumps xD Lovely piece :dummy:
AerialGeoDuck75's avatar
A beautifully written piece, you have a wonderful way with words.
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ParallelCatStudent Traditional Artist
This is wonderful! I laughed my way through the first few lines and was in awe at the last few. You're a great writer.
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haphazardmelodyHobbyist Writer
The entire thing is brilliant, but I would have added this to my favorites for the last line alone.

Would you mind terribly if I write a poem based off that last line? I would absolutely link your piece to mine, drop you a comment, all that good stuff. :)
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:iconaparazita-r::iconsquirrelflight-77:Your artwork has been graciously featured in Titans Genuine Literature feature ,stay wonderful!Hug:iconsquirrelflight-77::iconaparazita-r:
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Also I suggested your piece as for a dd but he said that it was miscatgerozied as prose. 
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UntamedUnwantedHobbyist Writer
Whoops! Thanks for letting me know (I'll fix that now)! Funnily enough a while ago, someone told me that this style was not prose, it was poetry because of how lyrical it was. :P

Oh well, back to the drawing board! :P
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I like the back and forth banter between the speakers. This style of poetry grabbed my attention and kept me hooked with the sarcastic tone. This makes you think in a different way just great!
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Gale-OneOfManyHobbyist General Artist
You, are a brilliant person. Wonderful.
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PhoenixEverAfterHobbyist Writer
This is one of the most beautiful things I've read in a long time!
Xenna93's avatar
Xenna93Hobbyist General Artist
this is so beautiful, makes me think of the world a little different than I did. :heart:
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UntamedUnwantedHobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :)
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:hug:
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UntamedUnwantedHobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Mireilles-epitaphHobbyist General Artist
This is a beautiful piece of writing. Heart  I love it!

And by the way, you're taking the words right out of my mouth Sweating a little... .
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