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And sometimes, coated and layered
with tens of scores of others' eyes
we forget the word 'lonely' -
so when it flings ashes
we blink, and are blinded.
It would be nice to be able to send someone tea via the internet.

Thanks :^nycterent: for the edit ^^

O_O A DD! Argh, most. Unexpected. Ever! Wow - thank you so much!
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Daily Deviation

Given 2011-04-14
Chin Up by ~Underground-Rogue stands out with its lovely brevity. "Crisp and crystal: worth a look, and worth a pause for thought." ( Suggested by Avallynh and Featured by nycterent )
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nikan2 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2019
this amazing
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nikan2 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2019
awesome work
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GNUBoarder Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
All my favorite poetry makes me feel like the author put words to something I've always subconsciously known, like you're drawing on some universal well of human experience. You did this in spades here. Thank you :-)
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Angeltears4 Featured By Owner May 17, 2011
I keep coming back to this poem and it's high time I left some form of comment! Basically, I'm really really touched. The brevity of this poem amazes me... how is it that you've said so much in so little?! :D good poetry makes me ache because it puts into words all these vague ideas no-one else has been able to clarify... you've done just that.

I love how you started with "And". It's like i've been placed right in the middle of something - like being in the middle of that crowd where you're so drowning in peple that you forget what loneliness is. coated and layered in so many people... i love that loneliness flings ashes. that's perfect too. most of all, i love this faintly naive, confused 'blink' before we are blinded. like how i finished reading this poem and paused and then it hit me.

you've gripped me in, what, 27 words? not even particularly unusual words? how did you do it?! :XD: you are an artist who has placed words in just the right order and just the right way to tug on my heartstrings. thank you very much!
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2011  Student Writer
Wow. This comment blew me away! Sorry for not replying for so long, things have been crazy!
I'm glad the brevity worked in this situation. I considered making it longer during the actual writing, but in truuth there was nothing more for me to say.
And I'm afraid I start way too many poems and sentences with the word 'and'. I excuse it with the fact that Blake did it too!
Thank you so much for your kind words. They really made my day.
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Hemophile44 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011
...I simply don't get it. The words are beautiful, but i don't know what they mean, and I feel like it's very meaningful. someone mind explaining to me? :D (I feel stupid...)
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011  Student Writer
It's about how loneliness suddenly comes on unexpected and sudden, and that makes it hit all the harder. But...expressing understanding of that loneliness, implying that the intended reader is not, in fact, alone.
Or that's the way it was intended, but it is open to interpretation.
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Hemophile44 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
truly beautiful, thanks for taking the time to explain it.
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011  Student Writer
My pleasure; thank you for taking the time to read and enquire =)
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CastIronFist Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011
:iconmotherofgodplz: This
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xxMordredtheDruid7xx Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011
This is beautiful! :heart: And congrats on the Daily Deviation! :D
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you so much, and thanks for the fav as well! A Daily Deviation was completely unexpected, to be truthful. I've pretty much just been bouncing up and down since that point!
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xxMordredtheDruid7xx Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011
You're very welcome! :D
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Tavoriel Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful!
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you!
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NothingHere94 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011
Wow. This is one of the best poem DDs I've seen, I think. You create so much great imagery and meaning in those five lines. The last line is especially beautiful.
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Student Writer
Your comment blew me away - thank you very much.
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NothingHere94 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011
You're welcome!
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auauautumn Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Student Writer
Loooove!
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Student Writer
:heart: Why thank you ^^
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fourbanger Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011
Beauty in simplicity. I like it.
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Student Writer
Sometimes sparing the words is the only way to actually say them. I'm glad you like it ^^
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you!
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TehAngelsCry Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Professional Interface Designer
Beautiful poem.
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you very much.
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BloomingLotus Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:clap:
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Student Writer
:heart: Thanks!
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nycterent Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011  Professional Writer
Lovely piece. Absolutely lovely.


Cut "of trust"?
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011  Student Writer
Good point, thank you! Change has been made.
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nycterent Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2011  Professional Writer
:heart:
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lindsayhatesyou Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011
FAAAABULOUSSS! FAAAAABULOUSSSS!!
:Heart:
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:
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cyranosdemet Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011
{(Rogue)} <-- generic all purpose hug of support for someone else who is truly beginning to understand what it is to be a writer... [link]
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FictitiousFolkLore Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student General Artist
Sometimes, when I watch people, I begin to wonder why I bother. You are the sort of artist I never wonder about. Actually, I do. I wonder why I don't comment more and fave more.

In short, this is wonderful. <3
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Writer
You're just so lovely, all the time.
And I just realised you're not on my watch list! HOW DID THAT HAPPEN? I was so sure you were!
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FictitiousFolkLore Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Student General Artist
:O oh noes!!!

Happy to hear that. :)
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Student Writer
It's okay! The situation has been rectified!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011
This is a perfect poem. Says it all. :heart:
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you so much.
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melli-melian Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Filmographer
T!
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Writer
*cracks up*
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melli-melian Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Filmographer
Glad I could make you smile.
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Writer
You pretty much always can ^^
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melli-melian Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Filmographer
Until I make you CRY! *rubs hands maniacally*
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Writer
Except when you BLOODY WELL KILL OFF FALOR AND ADI AND MELI.
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small-hope Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:

- S.H.
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Underground-Rogue Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2011  Student Writer
*cuddles*
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