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Pony Portraits: Twilight Sparkle

I'm finally done with the main six! 

Well, probably. There are a couple of things in this picture that I am not quite happy with, and I may go back and edit it. But, for the time being, this is it. 

I would love critique on this. If you would be willing to take the time, I would like to hear your opinions. :)

Other portraits in the series-

 portrait: Rainbow Dash by turnipBerry   Pony portrait: Fluttershy. by turnipBerry   Pony portrait: Applejack by turnipBerry   Pony portrait: Pinkiepie by turnipBerry   Pony portrait: Rarity by turnipBerry



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I like the color

overwatg's avatar

( my vote ) 100,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,0000/5

TheAwesomeKitten's avatar
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Though it's completely amazing, the sudden change from the other pieces of work bug me.
The mane isn't much like the show, but it's twilight. It's a bit strange how it looks like the wings connect, but I still like it. The body is a bit realistic compared to the head.
Remember, I'm pointing out cons. If I have to, I'll list pros but not very detailedly:
There's more to list but i'm very very very bored right now.
MuddyPaws375's avatar
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Vision - The vision is superb. I can see everything that is going on. Twilight Sparkle is flying through the sky, preparing to cast a spell. The texture on the feathers, the clouds and the mane/tail stand out to me /because/ they are well done. Nice use of realism on those components.

Originality - I'm a little torn here. What I saw immediately on this picture was the wings and how they span out past the flank and are connected. It is indeed very creative but thinking scientifically on the form of how a pegasi would be... This wouldn't very well make sense. To say the least, if the wings were to rest at Twilight's side, they would fan out behind her flank. It would look a bit odd, yes? None the less, I give you points on how the wings are but I dock a single point on consenting to a realism state.

Technique - The Technique is something I've seen before. However, you somehow made it... Unique. This picture stood out immediately because of the wings and the colors, mostly. The value scale you used on the whole picture is amazing on a new level. I've seen artwork like this but this is definitely something unique to me.

Impact - The impact it has on me... I feel a bit of freedom while looking at this. The feeling of being able to feel the air of twilight. However, I feel it would have a better impact if it showed what Twilight would be casting a spell at or why she was casting one. However, the impact as it is is large enough for me to give full points.
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Holy moley. This is better than the show! When I draw horses, I do good art but nothing like this! The vision was good, nut blurry, it was a new insight on MLP that I've never seen before, you had a neat style of doing it, and, honestly, it really impacts my view on MLP. I would actually request Rainbow Dash (if haven't already, I didn't check), but that's just me. The point of me saying that is: keep it up! I've seen a lot of artists on this site but none have done anything with such skill and detail. You should join the animation team fir MLP! You could seriously change the show for the better. You're fantastic.
turnipBerry's avatar
Thank you very much for the feedback.  I just wanted to warn you though, I plan on rating this critique "unfair." Please don't be offended. It's just that I don't want too many critiques to pop up under the deviation, and to be honest, there isn't much constructive criticism in this.  I'm sorry, and once again, please don't be offended. I really do appreciate you taking the time to leave a critique. 

Thank you. 
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There are some interesting dynamics at work here. Not the least of which being the night-to-day melded color palette that forms the background, the light hues and textures are masterful.

There is only one thing that's visually off at first glance, but actually a clever one. The way the wings are rendered are most akin to a hummingbird's in the way the feathers converge at the back. This opens up an oft-glossed over question; avian wings aren't uniform in structure. While the show's rendering leaves it up to debate while unfolded, I personally draw them unfolded in a more angelic-type rendering, which converge at the shoulder. There exist many different ways in the fandom to render them as well, both folded and open.

But when you think about it, hummingbirds have their feathers as such as (I believe) it is more conductive to hovering over sustained flight. Pegasai have been shown to be capable of such behavior, sometimes with little seeming effort. Thus, the choice to meet the feathers in the back could be a smart one, even if it is an uncommon way to render them. And what majestic wings they are! The flight feather's transparency in the light is a particularly nice, realistic touch, and they way they meld into the shoulder are particularly believable.

That aside, I'd like to take a bit to point out the actual composition of the picture. Twilight's body occupies the right thirds division line that is academically correct according to the Rule of Thirds, a common photography guideline to strengthen the image. The clouds in the background agree in motion lines with the left wing, creating a sense of "flow" that helps greatly. The perpendicular angle of the body and other wing gives a contrast that emphasizes the motion, making this strong picture-wide.

However, if I may make a suggestion, perhaps you could extend the canvas on the right to fully encompass the tip of her wing instead of cutting it off at an arbitrary point. Perhaps 100 pixels or so; enough space so that the tip would be same distance from the right side that the highest feather is from the top. It would close the borders, condensing the impression of the picture; "framing it", as it'were. It's quite close to the "widescreen" 16:9 format, so extending it on both ends by 108 pixels as well as 50 pixels combined vertically (1920x1080) each would put it at perfect widescreen computer background size.
ndogmario's avatar
I agree . Just a little bigger
turnipBerry's avatar
Thank you for the feedback. :D I hadn't thought overly much about the base of the wings, and you made a good point about the tip of the left one. I do plan on editing this, primarily because I want to rework the main and tail, so I will keep your advice in mind. 

Again, thank you. 
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This is absolutely beautiful! There is not one flaw. The colors fit together perfectly with the sky and TwilightSparkle. Especially the use in colors. The clouds matched Twilight's fur perfectly. They actually looks real an amazing mixture of pink and purple. Twilight herself looks awesome. I can tell you took really good cautious in make the feather just right. You even made sure to let some feather show where the wings first start coming out of her body, I never see that, The time you took on this was Definitely time well spent. You did a fantastic job!! Keep up the good work <img src="…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=":D (Big Grin)"/>
Sstygal's avatar

Damn I really wish I could be this good

Azraellis's avatar
I am usually very very picky about the wings-over-rumb thing, especially in dragons. But you pulled it off fine.
I also love how transcendent this is. It feels more like the "next level" Twilight is in, something that only alicorns can perceive.
This pic is this week's desktop background for me. Thanks for all the work.
turnipBerry's avatar
Geez, this thing is ancient though... Thank you. :) 
ShaleZookeeper7's avatar
BEAUTIFUL!!! I love how you made the wings!!! That' what I like most about this drawing!!!Clap Clap Clap :happybounce: :happybounce: Love Love Love La la la la La la la la La la la la 

KrysaVorona's avatar
Wow, that's so beautiful,  I love her wings! :wow:
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RobintheNerd's avatar
I love it! :happybounce: 
just curious, why did you split the hoof? 
turnipBerry's avatar
That's something that I do with almost all of my unicorns. It's based on traditional folklore. In a lot of medieval depictions of unicorns, they are described as having deer like, cloven hooves, and sometimes a lion like tail. :D
RobintheNerd's avatar
cool:) learn something new everyday
vanbot's avatar
The use of lighting in this is incredible!!
turnipBerry's avatar
Thank you very much. :)
reel-world's avatar
wow nice light effects on horn
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