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Well here goes nothing, you've given me plenty of information on how to improve my art, lets see if I can return the favor. We both know you took a lot of time to get each frame to be extremely detailed, interesting, and show accurate as possible and the craftsmanship within each frame and on the running Zecora at the bottom is very well done. However there's always something that could be improved upon. Each frame is so well done that, in my opinion, the hazey combination of each frame is holding it back. Again I know you've already put a lot of effort into this piece and I feel bad for saying anything negative about it but here's my suggestion if you ever want to come back and change it.

What I would suggest would be a themed, hand drawn, solid framing. If you remember the Hearth's Warming Eve episode and how the windigoes were drawing, to have this swirling trail where ever they went. Using some effect like that to become the theme for the bordering might have yielded a stronger piece.

Overall though, your work continues to be VERY strong and extremely well done and I hope this critique helps in some way.
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:icondziadek1990:
dziadek1990 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... this is REALLY pretty.
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:iconnightcaster460:
Nightcaster460 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2016   Digital Artist
Sorry about your niece... :iconsadhugplz:
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:iconkinda-l:
Kinda-L Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2016  Student Digital Artist

Is this some time?

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:iconfotland42:
fotland42 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2015
The party goes on
A zebra runs with warnings
The night's not over
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:iconfotland42:
fotland42 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2018
Why did I write a haiku?

Well, why not?
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:iconzanarnaryon:
ZanarNaryon Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sorry about your niece, I know that something like this only will look false, and I am nowhere near to feel your pain, but I'm so sorry
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:icontswt:
TSWT Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2015
it's okay--i disabled comments on that page so that people wouldn't feel obligated to try and think of something to say. it's hard feel up to offering consolation over something like that.

I'm okay though, I believe she's in heaven.
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:iconzanarnaryon:
ZanarNaryon Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't say I know how you feel, since I'm not you, and I deal with death in a different way, but even if I'm not a christian, I'm sure she's where ever she wan't to be
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:icontswt:
TSWT Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2015
well she was so extraordinarily young that she may not have had the ability to 'want' to be anywhere except with her mother.

but that is sort of the point! jesus loved little kids' faith and innocence--and made a specific point of saying that the kingdom of heaven belonged to them. not only that she wasn't old enough to understand the difference between right or wrong--so i believe she's with god now.
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:iconzanarnaryon:
ZanarNaryon Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.
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AlphaRH Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014
Just curious what happened to your niece 
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014
Raven: ... Sorry about your niece.....
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:iconrenardprower:
RenardPrower Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The window on page 22: Digibro much?
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:iconnun2artzy:
Nun2artzy Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student Digital Artist
God I love your contrasting styles and compositions. Full line work characters with matte paint coloring on top of a rich background? What more could you ask from a comic?
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:iconsassycat2:
Sassycat2 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Incredibly detailed, although I have no idea what's going on :D
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:icontswt:
TSWT Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
just some memories of the night
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:iconsaddust:
Saddust Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013
Those memories are just beautiful...
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:iconstrabatz:
Strabatz Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
again goosebumps.
wow...
i am sorry, i am not good with expressions.
Just let me say, that you are the most impressive artist i've ever have seen.
So much passion... so much emotions in every panel.
MLP means a lot for you, didn't it? .__.

i am horribly sick, and have to die soon, maybe i have 5 years.
MLP gave me a spark of hope back, and a lot of joy in my life.
I met a lot of cool people in the fandom, and my fate in the humanity restored a lot.
I thought, there are way lesser people with... feels, and fantasy, and .. all those things, who makes a life worthful.
But this fandom.. *sniffle* just never stop havng this passion and fire, dear artist.
I bet, there is one day we meet each other in Equestria. Our own paradise.
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:iconthedescendantofkehan:
TheDescendantofKehAn Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hoping against hope here, but is there any chance we could see the images of Spike and Twilight as individual pieces?:)
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014
Raven (No, not an animal Raven. Check my gallery) : ...... Why's there a pic of me as your avatar?
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:iconthedescendantofkehan:
TheDescendantofKehAn Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Because they're awesome.:)
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014
Raven: ...... I'm awesome?
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:icontswt:
TSWT Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
well i mean i guess sure. any particular format you want them in?
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:iconthedescendantofkehan:
TheDescendantofKehAn Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Any format that works best and is easiest for you. I love "SpiLight" (family-shipping, friend-shipping) stuff, and to have both of those images by themselves in a nice, large picture would be great (I'm assuming that you made the images first, and then put them in the comic). I like the idea of Twilight coming across Spike sleeping, and then wrapping him in a blanket and carrying him to bed. It's a very tender scene, and I like how you highlighted it with the hearts on teh stairs. The two pages seem to "glow", and those last two really set them off. I promise to submit both to the Spike groups, if you will present them. Thanks!
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:icontswt:
TSWT Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013
fav.me/d6khoe2

here you go. no need to submit them to any groups though
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:iconthedescendantofkehan:
TheDescendantofKehAn Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I did anyway, because you deserve the recognition. Thank you so much for taking the time to upload this!:)
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:icon9blueturtles:
9blueTurtles Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
Do my eyes deceive me? Is that Digi? (Next to Carrot Top)

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Very well done. Can't wait to read more, in fact I'll do that right now!
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:icontswt:
TSWT Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013
i am not sure who digi is!

but it's this joe images.wikia.com/mlp/images/0/…
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:icontrinosan:
trinosan Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
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:iconbonesatellite:
BoneSatellite Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
These two pages are magical. The lack of borders between each image really conveys the feel of memories from the night before, and Zecora's running presence (Twilight better have invited her as well, if all of Ponyville is out partying) provides a reminder that something big, possibly dangerous, is still happening. The other two things that get me are the textural detail you put into those buildings that give it the feel of a village in a high fantasy setting, and the sight of Spike turning in early with a cupcake perched on his snout...though I do hope Twilight isn't trying to act like a mother all of a sudden.
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NaosUnlimited Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013
These look amazing! :)
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:iconlacy700:
Lacy700 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ZECORA!!!
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:iconsonictailsbros4ever:
SonicTailsBros4ever Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013
HOLY FREAKING CRAP, THESE ARE GORGEOUS! *U* *U* WOW! Geez, every single thing is PERFECT! *U* AW! 
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:iconeamr262:
EAMR262 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
It's getting better and better by the page/s!
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:iconmyminiatureequine:
MyMiniatureEquine Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your art,
SO GUD.
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:iconsnoopy20111:
Snoopy20111 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
There's no evident ground, so I'm not sure if Zecora's running or floating...the stars in the 2nd panel seem to confirm she's in the air. I wonder what it could be?
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:iconparaspritehugger:
ParaspriteHugger Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
And suddenly, Echoes by Pink Floyd plays in my head...
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:iconmrspartin:
MrSpartin Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This pair of pages doesn't really need dialogue as I gather whats happening. The only thing I don't get is why Zecora is freaking out but I have a feeling we aren't supposed to know that just yet anyway.
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:iconanzul:
anzul Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
transition page?
still feels like part the prologue/"my world" though
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:iconlightsideluc:
lightsideluc Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Somzebra seems to be in distress. What could have caused all of her unrest?
:iconzecoraplz:
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:iconvalleyviolet:
valleyviolet Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist
Oh dear... somezebra seems to be in distress. :(
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:iconlennytribe:
LennyTribe Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh boi... can't WAIT!
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:icontclego:
tclego Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm really exited to see where this goes!
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:iconzbvfdb-p:
zbvfdb-p Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Very good.  I, too, would like to see Derpy alone.
Side note: isn't it great how Deviantart substitutes underscores for about half of this file name?
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:iconshygaladriel:
ShyGaladriel Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Can we see that Derpy just by herself? She's gotta be one of the cutest renderings I've seen!!! <3 :)
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:iconfimvisible:
FiMvisible Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Woah, this is breathtakingly awesome. :o I must say, every page you're churning out if damn worth the wait.
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:iconfimvisible:
FiMvisible Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
is*
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:iconpunk-pegasus:
Punk-Pegasus Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
These are a great pair of pages. The scenes are all very well conveyed even without dialogue (except for the first panel of the second page, although RD and AJ's expressions are good enough to leave it up to interpretation.). You covered so many character and scenes in these two page that it's a feast for the eyes. There are so many awesome things to look at. Great work, and I'm looking forward to more!
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:iconlurks-no-more:
Lurks-no-More Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
But what about Zecora among the stars?
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