Hmm. The piece is very well constructed--I especially like the little details at the beginning, like the umbrella--but seems to be missing something for me. Perhaps it's because LBGT stories are more popular than ever before, both in my old writing classes and in popular literature, and the "accidental outing" plotline is a staple.

I'd almost like to see what comes after the final prayer--the way that someone could mentally reconcile traditional Catholicism with a lifestyle that is most certainly not is intriguing.