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Now lilies wilt in crisping pale
They float their petals in glass bowl
Of torrid ocean rushing stale
And nevermore a flower whole.

Come, drift with me on memory
When love was pure in ivory
Our dreams are stained with lusted red
A thorn is left in lovers' stead.
Simultaneously inspired by the lilies dying in a vase on my table and a truly awful flower all the girls were given in my sixth grade class. The attached card said something like "You are a precious flower. Each time you engage in premarital sex, you lose a precious petal. Don't leave your future husband holding a bare stem. Abstain!"

Hahahahahahahahahaha
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katarthis Featured By Owner May 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
lol. Good God what trying to follow the good God does to well intentioned folks. I'd say you turned your memory and inspiration into a high class work of art. And don't worry, as an American, I find we're all highly insane over here. But one takes where one is born in stride.

k
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely poem, horrid thing to do to those poor six grade girls!
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wildhype Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2010
brilliant
bloody
fakking
brilliant
:heart:
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anarcho-hope Featured By Owner May 31, 2010
"They float their petals in glass bowl
Of torrid ocean rushing stale"
Wild
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner May 31, 2010   Writer
I'm gonna hope that's a good thing and say 'thanks' :)
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pandoras-enigma Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
It's a lovely little poem, but for some reason the impression I got was that someone was a prick. :P
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010   Writer
In what sense?
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pandoras-enigma Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010
I stuck on the word thorn.
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2010   Writer
haha, gotcha.
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pandoras-enigma Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2010
lol :D
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Oh, wow. :giggle:
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2010   Writer
lol, I know...
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Al-Fatman Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010  Professional Interface Designer
Good ol' Christianity. Lovely poem
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010   Writer
lol, thanks :)
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andyslade Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2010
Your graceful words are overcome with a loud FFS.

:disbelief:
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010   Writer
Maybe it could have done without the artist's comments...but it was too funny to pass up!
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Omnius666 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing poetry, fucked up way of raising kids :)
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010   Writer
I'll say! (to the latter more than the former)
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li1121 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010  Student Writer
:rofl: I literally went from "Aww, that was amazing" to "HAHAHAHA". Abstain or thou shalt wither! :shakefist:
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010   Writer
hahahaha I know
I only thought of it because lilies are supposed to represent purity
So it kind of went hand in hand
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li1121 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010  Student Writer
In 6th grade, I was told that sex was actually good. Who knows what they're telling children now...
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010   Writer
Catholics are insane.
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li1121 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010  Student Writer
Except for Auden :D
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010   Writer
Ok, American Catholics are crazy.
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li1121 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010  Student Writer
I'd say that Americans in general are crazy, but it's probably more like the entire world that's crazy.
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010   Writer
They really really are.
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010
hmm, you don't have critique on, but i think it's awkward starting with 'but' ?
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tina-go-lightly Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010   Writer
It is
I just didn't feel like puzzling it out yet
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ChloroformBoy Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2010
fair enough.
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