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A Lonely Night

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Here I am again in another sleepness night,
I wouldn't want to be dreaming even if I could,
Down this tunnel of queries, no end in sight,
This night's filled with thoughts bad and good...

I can't help but think, is this how people are supposed to be?
WONDER this, how much worse can we people be to each other?
ABOUT now is the time we have to think about change for the better.
SOCIETY is starting be more of 'every man for himself'.
I wonder about society.</u>

I can remember all these things that happened in the past.
When I think about this, it takes me back to happier moments.
But everyone's past also has its share of sadnesses.
On a lonely night, I take trips to this, my former present times, as well.

Past loves.
I find myself thinking about this more than the other two.
I ponder what went wrong, if there was anything I could do.
Each one a different case, each had different mistakes.
When added together, they form the perfect heartbreak.

So much to think about, so much coming to me,
In my most quiet times, this is all in my head,
Will I be able to sleep at all, yeah, eventually.
When I close my eyes, I'll have dreams instead.
Well, this one took a while to think up and do for that matter. Basically, the things talked about in this poem are what I think of on sleepless nights or at work when I'm by myself. As you will probably notice, the three things I write about are written about in different forms. I'm writing separate poems about those issues, each in the style they're written here. It's a different idea, I hope it works out good. Opinions are always appreciated!
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MoniKamarta's avatar
sometimes I feel the same, beautiful :hug:
1337alicat's avatar
"Past loves.
I find myself thinking about this more than the other two.
I ponder what went wrong, if there was anything I could do.
Each one a different case, each had different mistakes.
When added together, they form the perfect heartbreak."

I really do love these lines Steven. there beautiful, but more so in a sweet sorrow kind of way.
themexican-pi's avatar
Thanks, it is something that I do think about a lot in my quieter times.
revengeangel's avatar
as usual very good writting. i am in a writers block for the moment and don't get on much. but i plan to put some of my old writtings that i worte a while ago on soon
themexican-pi's avatar
Thanks, as always, I'm glad you liked it. I'm currently in a writer's block as well, but I hope to pull something out of my hat. I'm curious to see your new stuff as well.
revengeangel's avatar
i am not so sure how good they are going to be. i am sill down and frustrated with all the stuff that has happened and going on. sometimes screaming just isn't enough. writing helps in a lot of ways for me which makes me even more frustrated that i can't get anything down to my liking.
themexican-pi's avatar
I'm sure they'll be fine. :) If anything, what I do is just write what you're feeling first, then edit later on, so at least you get the feelings out.
sorceressnymph's avatar
It's very good....I like how you have the I wonder about society and how that is put together in the bold and then repeated below. Nice word choice as well.
themexican-pi's avatar
Thanks for your nice critiques! :hug: It took me a little bit of time to come put with that sentence. But I'm glad it came out well. :D
sorceressnymph's avatar
:glomp: Anytime ^_^ It turned out very good ^_^
TorridButterfly's avatar
I really like the 4th... stanza (is that the right word?) It touches on the way I'm feeling now...
themexican-pi's avatar
Thanks for commenting. I'm glad to see someone can relate to how I can feel. :hug: You'll be all right, I'm sure. :cuddle:
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