LunaInvidia vs. Demoness-Melody (2-3)
I like how this starts using your last round! And good to see inside your character's head. The doctor's assistant point of view is also a cool choice in my opinion, as you are discovering what happened even as he is.
I like the opening to your second part, but could have done with some more description of your opponent. It was hard to picture the whole scene there, though that could have been intentional of you. However, I like Persephone and Kleio's initial exploration of the broken arena/maze, as well as how you're entwining these flashbacks. I do find myself starting to have trouble keeping track of which is which, though. As far as opponent things! Her dialogue and description does feel a tiny bit off, but you seem to be doing Kleio very well overall.
Man, it makes my brain hurt to find grammar errors in a final round (“but their hadn’t been a tie in the box” and such.)
I'm liking the fight so far. It's easy to