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Please feel free to give me CONSTRUCTIVE criticism on my latest writing piece or even just give it a fave. It starts out boring, but trust me, the end is good and it only get better from here.

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RedtheKitsune Featured By Owner May 22, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
They autocorrect makes it a little hard to read it without breaking immersion, though I can understand with you having dyslexia. To fix this you should do a pre-post check to make sure everything is how you want it, be thorough though, as small words can be missed.

Another gripe is about the detail in the story.
The detail seems lacking. You should tty adding more imagery into the story.
For example you could say" I felt an intense burning as a wound opened on my back, and soon after warm blood began to drip from it, easing down to my legs."
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TestToBePossessed14 Featured By Owner May 22, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Alright. Thank you.
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RedtheKitsune Featured By Owner May 22, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope this is of help without being excessively brutal. °﹏°;
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TestToBePossessed14 Featured By Owner May 22, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's perfectly fine. These are very good tips.
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RedtheKitsune Featured By Owner May 22, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh.
Okay, glad I could help!
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