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A New Breed: Book 2: Chapter 24

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And here we are...

- Polecat

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I admit, I was expecting the griffons to be in a less victorious state by the end of the last numbered chapter.

Then again, we know the proper form for a trilogy is for the first installment to be a self-contained test of the market, whereas the second and third tend to exercise the freedom to be strongly linked that their already-proven footing grants them. So I shouldn't be that surprised.
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This was my "Empire Strikes Back", yes. The villains came out on top with a major victory...

- Polecat
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1st page: "Zilch had gone well beyond >>his<< intent..." - Isn't Zilch female?

page 16: You used "all but screamed" 2 times, once in the middle of the page "“SHUT UP!” Clockwork all but screamed..." and then in the 2nd paragraph after that again "...you ducked out of your punishment?!" she all but screamed. It feels quite repetitve.

But that gives me the opportunity to ask... cause I am wondering about this kind of phrase for quite some time. That phrase is used a lot in English and I don't get it. "She all but screamed" means that she did scream... but isn't the "but" negating that? So that she did everything but scream? I can't seem to wrap my head around that. Or wait... could mean she did nothing else but scream? That kinda works.

Also love Clockworks meltdown and her ripping Ultrapony a new one.

page 25: "Clockwork whirled on much larger mare..." - I think there needs to be a "the"
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"His Intent" was referring to Discord's intent for what Zilch was doing.

Doh, I thought I got the repetitions out.

Yeah, I lost a "the"

And yes, the "All but X" phrasing is odd, but it's used a lot in literature. I think your final assessment is the correct one.

- Polecat
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Huh, that is a bummer for Relic...

Also interesting to see Discord interacting with Celestia in a non-antagonistic fashion here.

huh, yeah that makes sense about Trixie's horn.

Ahhh, giving that element to Skillet, I can certainly see how that works.

Huh, well that was a heckuva venting session from Clockwork there, loud enough to wake the almost-dead...

Hmm, I certainly believe Celestia and Luna's words regarding Ultra's ultimate fate...

Good to see Filigree and Verdegris meeting up again, and that their relationship is on the road to mending.

And another piece in the puzzle of Clockwork getting better...
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Yeah, Relic was a little bummed about it too.

Oh yeah, there will be more of that in the future, I'm sure. :)

I figured it would. Trixie's horn is a special rule all to itself anymore.

Yeah, Clockwork really let him have it.

Yup, it was THAT close.

Aye, Filigree and Verdigris found their start...

Yup, another piece of her puzzle.

- Polecat
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Awww yeah! Now this is an ending I can get behind. Even Sacrifice felt sorry for Ultra :D
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I'm glad you liked it. Even if Clockwork wasn't so forgiving...

- Polecat
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I...just wow. Thank you for this so much. This brought so much closure for me on some issues I was genuinely scared about. Ultrapony goes to the summerlands. The fact that I hated this guy so much in book 1 and now was almost in tears during his time in the spotlight in this chapter shows how well you redeemed him. Clockwork and Celestia together at the end was just beautiful and Spectrum, Spectrum lives! I would have been beyond crushed if this was the end for her. Filigree and Verdigris finally have a touching reunion that they both needed. Now we just need Celestia to patch things up with Zilch and it would be perfect. Heh, I don't know if that's even planned but it's all good. Now I look forward to the epilogue on the night that I stay up far too late to finish this just like the first book, haha. If I think of anything else to add I'll probably just mention it on the epilogue page. Just know that this chapter was amazing.
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Thank you. Redeeming the irredeemable character was an interesting challenge, but I really felt there needed to be some sort of closure for him. That ghostly conversation with the unseen Rainbow Dash was something my editor suggested and I really liked...Clockwork and Celestia was the "full Circle" of the header, since this story started out way back in Book 1, Chapter 1, with Celestia and Clockwork. Filigree and Verdigris have a bit more to go tho, as there is some acceptance, but not yet forgiveness. Zilch and Celestia will... come. Sorta. I don't think it'll go as you expect tho. ;)

- Polecat
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Story wrap up, story wrap up... let's read about the harrowing cheer!
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". It didn’t matter that he was far taller than he was,"
far taller than *she was

"You, one of the strongest specials in Eqeustria,"
*Equestria

Gah, cliffhanger chapter feels writing machine mayIhavesomemore?
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Only "more" You get is the Epilogue I fear. In this instance, it's setting up for Book 3... which I need a break before jumping into.

- Polecat
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Yeah, I need one as well. Who am I kidding, I'd go to the future to read it, were this a perfect world.
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