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A New Breed: Book 2: Chapter 20

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And so we have finally reached the climax... mwahahaha.

- Polecat

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qaszxcvbnmklp's avatar
Daaaaw, clockwork x galaxi ship oh the feels :3
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*chuckles* :D

- Polecat
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I just started 24, you have just sent my mind on an emotional rollercoaster!! I love the story!! (>•_•)>
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Thank you. I'm glad I was able to get the emotions right. ;)

- Polecat
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One would surely hardly be strange if one were to wonder why the maids at the palace have such French (well, Prench I suppose) uniforms. And one would surely conclude that Tia is most likely the major player in determining what the maid uniforms look like. Which leaves me asking whether Tia think it's funny, or likes ogling flanks.
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Eh, I just did it because the maid uniform is iconic. It also has a far less than french origin, actually stemming from British Victorian ages and the like, a sort of "evolution" of the "Ladies in Waiting" for the royalty of the middle ages. Admittedly tho, they wore full length dresses, and sometimes not even in black and white (Mary Poppins is a good example of alternative looks for that sort of job).

Yes, I know way too much about this topic. >.<

- Polecat
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Great chapter. Having a busy schedule lately is working in my favor, I don't have to wait to see the next chapter, it is already out!
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My phone didn't like issue 20, so I had to wait all week till I could get internets to download it. Also, why is it specials cannot be part of the royal guard again, and is there a kind of "police" division? If not best make one, make sound all official or something, like the Royal Equestrian Athorized Police or something and be sure to include an anti-specials Rapid Response Squad (made of specials loyal to the crown of course, or at least one of them! Go Solar Empire!). Now, on to reading!!!
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The general seperation is that specials had their own "division" per-se... they became agents. Thus the Guard was "normal" ponies, and the Agents were specials.

And the Guard I play as sort of halfway between the police and the military, they essentially do both roles.

- Polecat
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OK, but what about specials who were in the guard before hand? hoof?? (this is kinda important, I'm taking notes here!!) Were they kicked to the curb when Luna disbanded the Agency? Or were they sent to do something else? Also, guards doing both military and police? Sorta explains the crime rate in the major citys. At least from my perspective. Thanks for the imput...still havent read latest chapter yet.
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That's what Flourish was. They get a lateral transfer to the agency. When the agency disbanded, they became free agents like all the others (tho I will admit I didn't address where they went from there). I will note that the next few chapters will likely be important to any spin-off, however. I won't give anything away, but some big things are a-hoof.

- Polecat
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Ooooh the fight is finally starting. And did you have to destroy the bedrooms? Why couldn't you all teleport/crash into the big long hallways or something?*sighs* In other news Discord is breaking free but I wonder if he will be evil. Frankly if he's been imprisoned since the Discord arc then the world has changed significantly since then and I would imagine that some specials could give him quite a run for his money now. Not to mention between Kaos' group and the Nightmare Discord may have to pick sides carefully. Or heck, maybe he'll just take no sides and rain chaos everywhere. I'd find it epic if he helped out the Princesses but who knows.
Also, and maybe it's just because it's been a long time since I've read the earlier chapters in this story, but I'm having a hard time remembering what exactly the goal of Kaos, and this mysterious Prince, actually is. Right now I don't see the point of them attacking the elements. Aside from the Professor who definitely has a reason to fight Clockwork. It would also be interesting to know if Kaos' group is even aware of the upcoming war with the griffons and the involvement of the Nightmare behind all of that. It's kind of like a 3 team free for all with Discord either becoming team 4 or joining one of the other 3. Also, loved the armor that Luna commissioned and the detailed description of it was awesome. I love reading stuff like that referring to equipment and the like.

Anyways keep up the awesome work!
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Yup, the two teams are about to throw down. And while Kaos' team has their own disparate goals, the deposing of the current Elements of Harmony was the primary one on the list.

As for Discord... I'll let everyone wait and see what I have in store there. :evillaugh:

I'm glad you liked Luna's armour. I had a rather striking mental vision of it, and felt it appropriate that she would feel need of such a thing, versus Celestia's less aggressive approach to things.

- Polecat
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Gah! They need an edit button on this site. Anyway forgot a few things. Fluttershy escaping from the Summerlands is awesome. Makes me wonder if anyone else can come and assist the characters at some point. Oh and Princesses, it's a general rule but if the animals are ever running from something that's a dang good thing to probably listen to (thinking of animals fleeing from tsunami's before humans know about them). One final thing, again it may be in earlier chapters but who the heck is the mysterious stallion that released Discord and disabled some of the palace defenses? If it's in an earlier chapter just tell me what one but at the moment I have no clue who this guy is. Wow I ramble a bit at 2am. Longest comments I've ever posted on here. Anyway, love the story and can't wait to see more of it. I still say this epic tale deserves far more attention than it gets.
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"Our celestial duties trump even those to our land, and they would <be> fools to pass up this opportunity."

"The four males, plus one female appearing unknown,"
This one confused me for a minute, I suggest "female-looking" or "feminine"

Okay, how EXACTLY does one escape the afterlife? Seriously. How do.

I'm going to assume that Discord went on a rampage when Fluttershy died, and somehow stoned himself. Yup.

All in all, great chapter. Setup is finally over, pieces are in play, players are glaring at each other and sipping their respective favorite soft drinks. Let's go.
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Yeah, I sorta ran into a bit of difficulty describing Zilch in that scene. >.<

Well, if it's anything like some depictions of "heaven", then it has pretty lax rules. Besides, Fluttershy could convince just about anyone to let her out... ;) As an off side note, my editor actually suggested that scene after I did the whole Fluttershy's Garden bit...

Not... exactly. I won't ruin what did happen, mostly because it doesn't get a proper reveal in this book (potentially book 3).

Yup, it's throw-down time.

- Polecat
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If you had said "four males and Zilch," it might have sounded rude, so it's understandable.
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page 5: "...and it sent them on a wild >>good<< chase for the past four days, on..." probably supposed to be goose?
page 10: "Only when he was >>sure snuck up<< on him did the stallion..." word missing
page 16: "...and they >>would fools<< to pass up this opportunity." word missing
page 20: "Verdigris was sure there was a better solution >>that still that<< eluded her,..." uuuh... something wrong there
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Damn, I thought I got all those. >.<

- Polecat
DarkonShadows's avatar
Let's see... hmm... yep.

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Well, that was... concise...

- Polecat
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The princesses quickly figure out someone sabotaged their defenses. The elements involvement is assured, but not as many people think they would be. The fight turns out mixed bag or the anti-heroes have 'some' of the upperhand throughout. I wonder how long before they realize they are all being played?

I have a reason to be silent or concise.
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I suppose so. You're not entirely correct tho. ;)

- Polecat
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When in the ballpark, get popcorn!
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