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A New Breed: Book 2: Chapter 08

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Yay, Chapter 8. Not a lot to say here about it, although I really liked how the Clockwork/Galaxi bit came out about midway through. Just think of this as a calm before the storm, cause things are going to pick up for a bit after this. ;)

As always, comments and feedback are encouraged and appreciated.

- Polecat

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That's weird ? It says : ''It appears you don't have PDF support in this web browser. Download PDF''. Yet, it was working on Firefox 13, and apparently doesn't work anymore on Firefox 14 ?

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>the evils the king has visited upon her.
-Visited ? Wouldn't ''inflicted'' had been a better word ?

>“She is, if King Goldtalon’s words are to be believed, a cursed gryphon whom is completely immune to all forms of magic, including divine magicks.”
-This seems very impressive, but... That's her ONLY power, right ? Immunity to ''all magics'', right ?
...then, just levitate a BIG rock above her head, and let ''gravity'' do the job. Easy.

>“I believe this s all the information
-''this is'' (small error).

>it was from stallion back home in Cannerlot
-''Canterlot'' (small error).

>“In short, it is believed that this is a final ‘revenge’ of the Nightmare… a curse, if you will.”
-*Facepalm*... A ? Curse ? A ''revenge'' from Nightmare ?
I do hope that it's only ''purely a figure of speech'', and that ''they'' don't actually believe it's a curse/spell/directly induced by Nightmare, while in fact it's an indirect reaction from the ''whole thing'' (war, conflicts, various drama, etc...).
It's medical, not magical or ''magically-induced''. -_-

>Well shoot, I never done figgered it mighta been some sorta spell!” Apple Bloom added.
>“That’s the diabolical part,” Trixie continued, tapping her hoof on the kitchen table, “there is no
certainty that it is a spell.
-Not... a... spell ...sigh...

>No pony is certain of how this has been spread, or how it affected so many ponies in so many different areas.
-For Pete's sake ! Don't these ponies have MEDICAL SCIENCE ?
They have advance computer technologies and such... surely, they don't still heal with leeches and lobotomise ''people'' with any form of mental illness ?!

MLP:FiM may be set in a ''magical realm/dimension'', but not EVERYTHING is magic/related to magic/HAS to be magic...

>This belies the idea that this is simply a psychological condition, as I had surmised, and makes it far more likely that it is a spell or curse.
- [link] *Boot to the head*
This just seem like so much of a bad(to put it mildly) decision there... politely said...

>“Showtime,” Trixie whispered as she turned to face the doorway.
-Yes, time for a good 'ol fashion intervention, for her post-war(or whatever) psychological prob-- OH WAIT ! Noooo, it was a fancy CURSE all this time ! Wait... MAGICAL curse, that's even better ! ...out-of-nowhere ! Because it's extremely convenient like that... *mumble grumble*

>and you didn’t abandon me when things were at their worst. We are not going to abandon you… I am not going to abandon you.
-She's so totally in love with Key.

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Huh... well... huh... ... ...Aside from something I *WILL* call a terrible decision... It's was an interesting chapter.
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I used inflicted initially, but I thought "visited" sounded more formal.

I won't say there aren't ways to defeat her. but that would assume she's walking onto a battlefield alone with no support too. I doubt the King would do that. ;)

Oops. Musta snuck through.

Cannerlot was supposed to be another accent inflection there.

Actually, hrm. I guess I wasn't obvious enough with the final segment here. The idea that it was Nightmare's Revenge is a falsehood created by Trixie (with agreement/cooperation from Princess Celestia) to appeal to Clockwork's loyalty and try to use it to coerce her into allowing them to help her. It's NOT magical, it never was. That's what the entire final segment was supposed to be about, and why Galaxi called Trixie out in their telepathic conversation about it. Trixie all but admitted to lying there, so... yeah. I thought I coreographed that better (my editors thought I had made it clear enough. >.< )

No comment on Galaxi and Key, other than to promise things get addressed more directly in later chapters. ;)

- Polecat
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>Cannerlot was supposed to be another accent inflection there.
-Accent on location's name just looks odd. Not exactly the best place to use a character's accent, I would say.
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Okay, I can buy that. But as a native of Baltimore, which we locals constantly butchered as Balmore, it seemed appropriate to me.

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Mmm... well even if it was gained in part by a deception, at least Clockwork is headed in the right direction again.

And that is interesting to hve that encounter with Chrysalis brought up...
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At least for the moment... ;)

And yeah, she exists somewhere out there, tho I doubt she'll make her presence felt in this story. There's already enough villains...

- Polecat
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Indeed, we've allready got a full-on league of villains assembling.
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:evillaugh:

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Full recap of the story thus far plus a few extra special elements thrown in. Also I think a stress disorder can not be forgotten only faded into the back of the mind. It's like forgiving someone for a social crime, but in some cases you'd never forget the infraction and will always remember what that person did.



Last Thoughts: I hope a Uriah Gambit doesn't come up, I can already see the Batman Gambit and a possible setup for a Backgammon Gambit. In any case Filligree is off the field for a few days, some griffons are in protection despite the fact that sonic based attacks are wide area and almost impossible to prepare for unless you have something that cancels vibration. I've have had an interesting thought of a being with a super voice using his vocal cords to vibrate his body out of phase with the rest of reality, I was just wondering if you think it twere' plausible. Galaxi isn't the only one that can help Clockwork... 'IF' the plan falls through, if it doesn't we have nothing to certainly worry about except the elements of harmony not being in harmony and that would be a terrible thing when something unobviously horrible comes up.
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Aye, some of this was a recap, or a condensing, of the story, or at least Filigree's part of it. It was also time to introduce to Gryphon families I mentioned a handful of times.... and you are correct. It's why Galaxi even said that, and why that point has been made a few times, PTSD cannot be "cured", just learned to deal with and adapted to... You learn to overcome, not cure.

I had to look up the gambits mentioned there, but I do not think I'm using them at this point, not that I could get any solid info on what a "Backgammon Gambit" was. Regardless, you'll see more of Alto in the future, and see how well the plan works when it comes to the Gryphon family's homestead... Tho as a note, when it comes to comic books and sonic "screamers", they usually can focus their attacks rather narrowly, usually maxing out at about a 90 degree cone... while often they can stun anything in full range of their voice, they usually can't HURT them at that radius, it takes a more focused "attack" then that. It's the same basic theory behind sonic weapons. If you're just trying to be heard, then it can be 360. To use the sound to do physical harm (beyond the eardrums), then you have to focus it into a tighter beam, generally the tighter the beam the more destructive it will be.

- Polecat
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Technically Celestia pulls Batman Gambits all the time, setting up a situation to go her way later with a possibility for failure. The possibility for failure is the only difference between this and a Xanatos Gambit. As such Clockwork is involved in a important Batman Gambit that relies on her acting in such a way to adapt to the problem, it's a gambit because Celestia is expecting her to act in a way that could help ease the pain of others on the risk that she may never forgive a good friend again and if she knew or ever figured out the other friend was in on it the gambit has double the potential of failure. The betrayal would break her even worse then she actually is at the moment.

A Uriah Gambit or otherwise known as 'Sucide Order Gambit' is something I suspect the new griffon king would use to get rid of those he doesn't need anymore. IE the king orders a cannon fodder manuever for those he really doesn't like to the front lines first, this gambit has a very powerful problem if it in fact backfires. A Uriah Gambit that backfires can lead to dire consequences for the one that set up the gambit in the first place. (An interesting example of a Uriah gambit involves using slaves dressed as soldiers who are sent into battle without weapons, with an army at their backs making it impossible to do anything but charge forward. It is a sadistic war move for the unscrupulous. The upside is the fake soldiers are easily capable of defecting if they can figure out a way to convince the opposing army that they aren't attacking them when being pushed by the real soldiers.)


A Backgammon gambit is a double layered distraction that hides a true goal while carrying out a secondary seemingly important goal in the form of the two distractions that leads attention away from the main goal. The first part of the two distractions involves specified targets being slowly informed of the second distraction or the informer being slowed in informing the intended informed. The second distraction would possibly be already in progress or having completed it's goals long before those informed can warn of anyone of the goals or arrive at the second distraction. The true goal carries out without being seen, thus the informed is led into playing a game of backgammon in going around the board missing sight of those passing by to perform the true goal while heading to the second distraction to find nothing is there anymore. (Thus Backgammon as pieces of two goals circle around the board before the opponent can catch on to what is happening in time, mostly requires an idea of how fast one is to respond to crucial information.)

Especially effective if the the informer is unaware that they were given the information to the second distraction on purpose. Tends to happens when spys are involved, ends up playing with a Cassandra Truth.
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Celestia pulls off one of those Batman Gambits right in the first two episodes it seems, trusting in Twilight Sparkle's personality traits to allow her to find friends and utilize the Elements of Harmony, so Celestia has proven she is quite capable of manipulating a great number of ponies, and still managing to be beloved by all of them.

And yeah, I read up on the initial two on TV Tropes to figure out what you meant. It's possible King Goldtalon could use it, but I won't reveal what plans he may or may not have in the future. ;)

I'll take your work on the Backgammon one, since that seems a bit overly convoluted to my mind... O.O

- Polecat
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