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She's sitting in Malaysia
In Malaysia
Baka kaya
Nagkamali siya?

Hey hey
My words
They don't want to be pretty anymore
Or grammatically correct
If only I could disable spellcheck
I'd be on my merry way

Bihasa - magaling
Sa Pamantasan ng mga Duling
Isinilang, basang panaginip
Giniginaw sa init
Ng araw

So Shy
Is it so fine?
My senses copulate with abandon
Under a red and yellow wagon
Swaggering the golden wheat
Smiling is such a feat
Of forlorn intelligence
Pseu-pseu-pseu

Pseu-pseu-pseu
Beeeooo.

...
where
okt 30, 2001
sln
...

sometimes the brain needs a break

...

update

Ok. I added a translation of the Tagalog parts down in the comments section.

There are no gender-specific pronouns in Tagalog, so "siya" refers to a he/she.


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sillygirl35126 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2001
?donde?

And ye harm none, do what ye will
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keen Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2001   Writer
roiling imagery in the undertow of your structure that passes up our shoreline to sneak between the sparkling sands with a hiss... and again we bask, drying in the warmth of your creativity.

sometimes we forget to thank the sun... ;) (Wink)

another exercise in the fantastique mari. always a pleasure reading your work.

step into the slipstream:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=99040
-flow-
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jsenn Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001
My, my, my, under the current...you know, the undercurrent, moves with force, not joyous, but with intent so one must move out of the way or be swept along, within, bundled, flailing (bundled and flailing would be opposite positions I suppose since you could not flail if you were bundled, but then I suppose you could godawfully want to with all your might and sometimes they almost feel the same, don't they?) hmmm who knows, we will leave it at that? yeah, there it will sit. Now...your senses copulating with abandon seems to be "another" sort of undercurrent that could move you with force, though possibly joyous, and the intent could be such that you would be more than willing to be swept along, within, bundled, flailing...hmm, ok we will leave it there, seems a good place to stay for awhile, don't you think? Oh I just know this is so totally off but I think I heard a lot of distress and then I heard you drift off on your own and it all seemed so disconcerting so I borrowed it and put it in this comment...but, hey, I did not spellcheck...LOL :D (Big Grin) Joy
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faithwalker Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001  Student Photographer
I like it even better! :) (Smile)

Faithwalker
Trout

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sumalangitnawa Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001

She's sitting in Malaysia
In Malaysia
Baka kaya
Nagkamali siya?
[ maybe she/he made a mistake? ]


Hey hey
My words
They don't want to be pretty anymore
Or grammatically correct
If only I could disable spellcheck
I'd be on my merry way

Bihasa - magaling
Sa Pamantasan ng mga Duling
Isinilang, basang panaginip
Giniginaw sa init
Ng araw

[ Expert - Excellent
At the University of the Cross-Eyed
Born, wet dream
Shivering in the warmth
Of the sun ]

So Shy
Is it so fine?
My senses copulate with abandon
Under a red and yellow wagon
Swaggering the golden wheat
Smiling is such a feat
Of forlorn intelligence
Pseu-pseu-pseu

Pseu-pseu-pseu
Beeeooo.

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hesitation Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001  Hobbyist Photographer
:smiles:
hey
that's nice.
unusual.


---------------
Woman by Birth
Bitch by Choice
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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001
That's a very interesting idea you have there. Nice execution. Fun poem to read, without a doubt.

8) (Cool) Dream on... 8) (Cool)
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faithwalker Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001  Student Photographer
I love the mixture of the two languages. This has a really beautiful flow....

Faithwalker
Trout

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skyOrange Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001

hahahaha!
you've made me one happy tagalog-speaking babae. the rhyming in your first stanza made me laugh.

nakakaaliw.
(baliw!) ;p


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meglocrush Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001
"My senses copulate with abandon" that line is rad. i wish i knew what the tagalog (i think i spelled that right) parts were.

:meglocrush: https://meglocrush.deviantart.com
(im not as eem as you think i am)
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locussolus Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2001
i didnt really get this one before, and i still dont... :o (Eek)

where is she now?
still in Malaysia?
deforestating spellchecks?
is smiling still forlorn?
pa-pe-pa-pe-rum

sorry, cant comment on the tag parts :) (Smile)
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