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albino
off white
eyes are black
a pigment sack

where are you
amidst the black and brown
a cream crown
[you smile, and upside-down
hard to tell if it's a frown]

now there gather round
your simple steps
nowhere found
the spitcup there awaits you
take the time you need to
drown


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sumalangitnawa
8/2001
yea. locussolus made that drawing. he was telling me about an albino cockroach at his porch. hmmm.
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jsenn Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2001
eeeewwww, yuk. Isn't it strange Mari that I can find beauty in your fish taco poem, in the bird eating your french fries and even in that one about the bus stop and but all I could think of was eeeewwww, yuk, in this one. Maybe part of the amazing power of a poem...whatcha think....is that another person reading this can imagine with clarity what you are talking about? Yeah in that respect I could say aye, aye, ma'am, very cool (eeewwww) poem. :D (Big Grin) (`.,,.
j♥y
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mastermindg Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2001
yes, very beautiful... i like the words in the [] that go "you smile, and upside down, hard to tell if its a frown" that great. nice poem.


feeling devious? the mastermind is.........
~mastermindg
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locussolus Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2001
the poem definately adds a new dimension to the cockroach. i thought it was just kinda interesting, but youve fused it to something tragic. beautiful words.

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faithwalker Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2001  Student Photographer
Mari, another fine fine poem. You can find beauty in the horrible!

Thanks.....

Faithwalker

Grow

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sanguru Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2001  Hobbyist Writer
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wow, I like this. kinda short, but capting all at the same time. It's great work. not only about a cockroach, but about life. Wonderfully done. Keep up the good work.

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*Sannie*
-I enter in silence
and in that way
I leave.-

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