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ice cream in a stale cone
touches my lip
as it melts
i catch a sip
springing into sudden sea
upon my tongue
it ceases to be
ice cream in a stale cone


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sumalangitnawa
8/23/01
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metaphor to life.


(it was actually forzen yogurt, but well, the cow certainly didn't make a distinction)
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skyOrange Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2001
*steals a lick on mari's ice cream*

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btrsweet Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2001
::smiles::
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corrodingsun Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2001
there is a principle at work in what you do that truly honestly makes me smile in a strange way.
brightfiregodgiven.

Lazarus Amen
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jsenn Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2001
I don't know, Mari, you have made me laugh tonight, you made me cry, you made me yearn for electric emotion, I haven't even read "Farewell" (although I do have my headphones on) and now you've made me hungry. :D (Big Grin) No, but the taste here is not unpleasant is it? It feels more like the promise of pleasure and distraction and it's very sweet because we are so used to the stale cone. It is always there? Yeah, from first stern look which cracks our world apart to the last moment, it is "ice cream in a stale cone" Nice...It is the most excellent metaphor which could spring into life, thousands of words, and you wrote it, and I read it and it was amazing.
(`.,,.
j♥y
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mastermindg Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2001
yeah, sweet like the ice cream i wish i had... i have to agree... as long as the ice cream is good the cone doesnt matter... nice ;) (Wink)


feeling devious? the mastermind is.........
~mastermindg
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faithwalker Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2001  Student Photographer
nice touch! Short and sweet!

Faithwalker

Grow

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