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anise so sweet
the doors fly open to greet
you
in you and around you
fennel sheets
and holy sugar beets
engaged in tantricnothings

i will only pause
to untie

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licorice-flavored necktie
1/4/02
sln
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well Noize of Wallis and Futuna, looks like it worked. i ordered this Glycyrrhiza glabra to make your necktie.

i don't know how long i can keep up with this!
Laughing

image from [link]
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keen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2002   Writer
the last line is the recoil that sends you again to the top for another cycle / another read...

lower yourself into:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=96646
-flow-
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skyOrange Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2002

galiiiing, mariii!! mmm.
"tantricnothings".. that's a nice combo of words. the first stanza kinda sweeps me off and moves me, twirls me into a haze. then the last line..

i will only pause
to untie

there is a nice romantic feel to it, eh? mm. very nice.

i know this was also request, but the lines don't feel forced at all. grace under pressure. ;]
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soma Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2002  Professional General Artist
mmmm- suddenly the candy i'm sucking on does not taste so sweet- not after tasting your words- yum.

live as if you were already dead
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lustrum Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002   Writer
i like your originality. they do make licorice with anise, don't they? No.. they use licorice to make licorice, duh. But anise smells like it!

all the same, c'est une bonne poéme,

lustrum
http://www.lustrum.org
A labyrinthine tale of God.
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moon Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2002
yummy...between you and noize...my sweet tooth has been awakened today. thank you for the lovely word flow. :) (Smile)

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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2002
That's sweeeeet!

8) (Cool) where dreams meet reality 8) (Cool)
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somnambulist Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2002
Has a formal yet dazed perspective. It's hard to describe in complexity. :) (Smile)

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Poo It happens, blame the Kitty-chan
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noize Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2002
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you did it!
i can't believe it!
and it's such a beautiful poem, too!!
with many things to say, to explore and touch!! so fine and mellow!! so sweet and bitter!! it's wonderful!! it tastes like licorice!! oohh.. wow!! :D (Big Grin)
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each time i'll wear
this licorice-flavored necktie
(that stains my fingers)
i'll think about you,
thank you.. thank you..
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sillygirl35126 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2002
Oh, my, this is very nice, yes, very nice. Such a different way to describe this thought within a poem.

And ye harm none, do what ye will
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