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Fear, seep in here
see, i face the white wall
stucco roughness against my knee
shivering from lost heat
stifling, faking a cough or two
to hide my silent wail

regress me, Fear
i said i wasn't afraid of anything
and something tells me
i better be
i shove order, with irresponsible betrayal
with lies that hide beneath the supernate
that once repulsed me
i lie

there is no love here
maybe only delusion
mistakes on the verge of bloom
regrets on the other side of doom
and in this room
i fill
i empty
i don't exist

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Fear, Seep in Here
dec 2 2001
sln
...
i never thought i'd post this. but i have to get it out of my system. i'll probably delete it soon.
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ngnd25 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2002   Writer
This chills me. Not only because of the effect of the words alone but also the effect of knowing you were killed shortly after this was posted. Almost like you knew and you had to say something somehow. :tears:

ngnd25
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namaste Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2002
Crying
all i can say
all i can do
Crying

i never knew you, and was not here when you wrote this
but i hope and trust you're in a place now where fear does not come.
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Faith is the bird that feels the light and sings when the dawn is still dark.
-Rabindranath Tagore
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kervansaray Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2002
:( (Sad)
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keen Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2002   Writer
sense the shadow
behind you:
-turn-
chase it away
with your light



lower yourself into:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=96646
-flow-
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skyOrange Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2002

i don't know how to express what i feel after reading this. you speak of fear, yet talk about it in a way that make me think you don't fear, like you're just acknowledging its presence. what i know for sure is that i felt a tinge of sadness after reading this.~

*hugs*
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solstice Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002   Writer
when you write things like this my own thoughts don't seem so strange
don't hold your poetry back - it might help you, and it certainly helps me
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soma Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002  Professional General Artist
thankful for the chance to glimpse this before it passes.....

live as if you were already dead
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lustrum Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002   Writer
last stanza + last few lines = Yes!

lustrum
http://www.lustrum.org
A labyrinthine tale of God.
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sillygirl35126 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
Hey! Don't delete it! I likes it!

And ye harm none, do what ye will
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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
That's very dark. I'm glad that Ihave a chance to read it b4 u deleted it.

8) (Cool) where dreams meet reality 8) (Cool)
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somnambulist Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
Excellent! :) (Smile)

Kinda like muse said really. :p (Razz)
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Poo It happens, blame the Kitty-chan
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faithwalker Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002  Student Photographer
I'm am glad you posted this. Seems another part of sln.

Faithwalker



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klf Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
the emotions flow througout, this is very powerful indeed. The imagery in the first stanza really hit me.

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-muse- Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
Very powerful indeed. I love the phrasing and the ending seems perfect - like a gentle rolling wave of an end, but with a little sharp *pow* to it.
Writing can be wonderful help...hope this did it.

-muse-
be well
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necropsy Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
really like this....kinda reminds me of my own style, but this time i think im able to read objectively..

keep it up

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eolhc Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2002
powerful writing, i hope posting it helps
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