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quietly, burn the secret words
let not the Universe hear
mutterings of a half-asleep fool

oh futility ~ in hushed tones or in loud
the power those words wield
[beyond Mind's control]
will tip the balance towards chaos

so taken by temptation ~ to be carefree
set loose the dire words
[Mind's own lips be dry]
like wildfire to sweep and incend
to char the hands with guilt
[to ashen Mind's delirious logic]

mute-defeated, fallen test
[mind fails]

dec 30 2001
i just called
to say
_ ____ ___
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ashoka Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002  Professional Interface Designer
Haven't spent much time in the poetry section . . . none really. It was the beautiful hand mudra that magnetized me here. Mudra may be my favorite poetry. This one reveals the grace, penetrating precision, subtlety and playful seductiveness of the one who formed it. Very nice. As it is . . .

keen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2002   Writer
the chaos theory of psychology eh?

nice work as usual, enjoying my chai and paging through scanned hands of mari-san.

lower yourself into: id=96646
hesitation Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002  Hobbyist Photographer
that's very well written,
great job, as always,
love it :D (Big Grin)

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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2002
I have to read it over a couple of times b4 I at least vaguely understand what's it all about. It's very thought-provoking, no doubt about that.

8) (Cool) where dreams meet reality 8) (Cool)
somnambulist Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2002
Powerful, and very psychological. :) (Smile)

Poo It happens, blame the Kitty-chan
boxed Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2002
I like this deviation because of the power in the words you have used. The line "oh futility ~ in hushed tones or in loud", is one of the nicest I've seen for a while.

I think i'm 100% satisfied with this poem. I don't think much more can be done with it, although perhaps replace the square brackets with circular ones :) (Smile)

Good poem!

_// boxed
lustrum Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2002   Writer
hmm, i see. and this has a very muted message -- not unusual! --, but it is also rather obvious, if one were to interpret literally what you have said. so, should i?

are the missing words "i love you!?"

and the chaos, and the confusion and the incending, of course, is all part of something very un-physicsy (fizzicksy). thus your consideration of its illogic? or the mind's illogical interpretation of "love's" messages?

ride on! all ye Warriors of Linguis and Istics!


A labyrinthine tale of God.
soma Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2002  Professional General Artist
this makes my fingers prick and tingle... an impulse not acted on...
powerful, as ever..

live as if you were already dead
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