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a cloud
is soft
with vapor whisper
i spat
at it
but it fell
right back
on my
face
i rub
my eye
cry
the cloud
washed
my tears
with its
own

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cloud
nob 17 2001
SLN
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it's about friendship

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Daily Deviation

Given 2001-11-19
Cloud by sumalangitnawa describes true friendship with grace, elegance and short form. In a very simple style sumalangitnawa proves what Shakespeare said “Brevity is the soul of wit”. Please read this unique and intelligent poem. Selected by `faithwalker. ( Featured by devart )
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nehamithbawkar Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2006
awesome!
:clap:
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girl Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2002
a simple poem, still, very nice and lovely.
i love it so much!
definitely a great work!
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Cynthia
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sillygirl35126 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2001
interestingly this brings me back to the days I'd look up at the sky and try to think of things a cloud cluster reminded me of. Nice poemem

And ye harm none, do what ye will
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rajivmathur Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2001
congrats on the DP. woohoo ! :D (Big Grin)
*waits for a mars bar*


rajiv--
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rethan Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2001
:) (Smile) this is a wonderful poem!!
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tosca Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2001   Photographer
you are too good. i like this one very much indeed. actually it fits my mood today.

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lustrum Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2001   Writer
Mari, Mari...

I'll spare you the long essay-comment this time. DON'T get used to it, though!

This is a warning.

;) (Wink)

lustrum
A labyrinthine tale of God.
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jibrille Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001   Interface Designer
Short and very sweet,
Congrats on Daily Poem.

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cooper Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001
congrats on the daily poem; its truly a nice piece

@coop@
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stylez Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001

wowm this is really awesome
I love how its short and sweet and precise, Well earned DP
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º°¨¨°º© !STYLEZ! ©º°¨¨°º
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aysel Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001
look! DP!! ha, now I'm really jealous of your talent.:P (Razz)

>_content and meaning"

Drift into my numb slumberland as I feel myself slipping away...
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meglocrush Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001
i agree with joy. im in awe. :) (Smile) you amaze me.

:meglocrush: https://meglocrush.deviantart.com
(im not as eem as you think i am)
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noize Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001

yes
it always come back

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giggly Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001   Writer
That is really beautiful, espcially with how simple it is. Very interesting, how you describe everything *tee hee* Yeah, great job ^.^

Red Crayon Red Crayon Red Crayon
Yet ah
why should they know their fate
Since sorrow never comes too late
And happiness too swiftly flies
Thought would destroy their paradise
No more; where ignorance is bliss
Tis folly to be wise
Thomas Gray Ode on a Distant Prospect of Eton College
Red Crayon Red Crayon Red Crayon
| |-|3@r+ j00 STUPIDBOY!!!!!!!!
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jsenn Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001
What a beautiful way you have of wrapping words which create astonishment and wonder around simplicity. LOL, oh, Mari, someday we should count the word awe in the comments of your work. Even you would stand in awe... (smile).

...Joy
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peepingdan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001   Digital Artist
oooh! I never thought of rain as tears!

Nothing to lose, so lets give it all up.
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2mo Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001
This is awesome work,
I love this.

Congrats on the dp!

[.2:MO]
///G:REALITY
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chosenone- Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001
Woha. Never knew so little words could move me so much. Great way of doing the poem, i luv it!

https://chosenone-.deviantart.com
Creative Assistant to myself
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keen Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2001   Writer
ha! the merlot toast is yours!

;) (Wink)

-congrats-

step into the slipstream:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=99040
-flow-
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aysel Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001
so short, sweet, simple, yet full of concent and meaning. Beautiful. *turns green*

How ignorant the human race is, killing itself off.
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keen Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001   Writer
oh, in you a find a kindred spirit. the focus is yours... sprinkled with a touch of zen.

step into the slipstream:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=99040
-flow-
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faithwalker Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001  Student Photographer
What a wonderful way of describing TRUE friendship!

Faithwalker
Trout

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hesitation Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001  Hobbyist Photographer
love it
the idea and the style
wonderful job.

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Woman by Birth
Bitch by Choice
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skyOrange Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001

nice poem. and story. that friendship is a blessing..


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rajivmathur Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001
i know i've already commented.
but i love this poem. great poem. simply awesome.

rajiv--
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miss-conception Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2001
you share your strengths well.~

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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2001
simple little pretty little poem. have a childlike ring to it. I like it.

8) (Cool) Dreamz = Reality 8) (Cool)
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teop Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2001
a humorous and at the same time touching poem. reminds of me of all those times i would try to spit out the window of my parents car when i was little and it would just come back at my face. hehe. good stuff!

teop

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rajivmathur Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2001
absolutely amazing. mari this so true, put across beautifully. excellent poem.


rajiv--
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-muse- Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2001
I love this one! I had to go back and read it aloud to myself - it has a wonderful sound to it.
Lovely work. :) (Smile)

-muse-
be well

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