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sigh
so rare as to be forgettable
when it's never me
it never fails to prick

i cannot stir
the depths of you
in the shallow of me
in which you wade

ravel before me
you hold a knife against
my navel
your eyes on a distant star

...
callous longing for the non-I
1/11/02
mari
...
hands hanging limp
tired of the truth
...
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kervansaray Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
tear
falls
and burns hole in my lungs

suffocate me to bare pain
under the water I had been wading

cut my hand
with the knife it held
and make sure to stab my eyes right there
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sillygirl35126 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2002
You never fail to write an excellent poem. man, I wish I could do that.

And ye harm none, do what ye will
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keen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2002   Writer
'you hold a knife against
my navel
your eyes on a distant star'

-distraction-

lower yourself into:
https://www.deviantart.com/deviation.php? id=96646
-flow-
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soma Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2002  Professional General Artist
the sighs are contagion- there is loneliness here, but much beauty....

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skyOrange Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2002

your poem makes me wade in sadness. *sigh~ you have a really nice way with words.
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slickwilly5891 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2002   Photographer
Very cool! The "sigh" at the begining sets a very calm tone for the poem! And I like it! Great writing!

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tash Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2002   Writer

Its a very emotional and descriptive, you have lots of talent make sure you keep using it :) (Smile)
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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002
I love the emotions in this.

8) (Cool) where dreams meet reality 8) (Cool)
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lustrum Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002   Writer
hehe, random long comment.

they come and go, y'know?

lustrum
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lustrum Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002   Writer
you ard i are bent on this "I" integration thing, eh? i dont know why, but it is the grandest of methods to simply insert "I" with a word, and what cunning little combinations can result! of course, there is little other way of directly(while still being indirect) conveying the "I", to me, and obviously to you as well. still, strange enough, after all this time, i could never really define "I" in my work - and you? i think you might take the same position as me, in that "I" is hardly defined; it takes a new assumption each time it is spoken. sometimes material, sometimes reflective, conjuntive, retospective, sometimes depicting another being all together, sometimes depicting "self" (which i feel is more easily defined).

where does your "I" emerge, begin, end, and not go at all? perhaps you cannot answer that, and that is why it is still a subject here and there in your poetry.

the most perplexing thing is the thing that perplexes only us!("I") We are the only ones to know this "I" - unless we show another, but then even they dont truly know that "I", they only glimpse it, and a single dimension of it, mind you! Each "I" is a new formula to be discovered, a great mathematical puzzle that neither Godel nor Turing could help you with, a vast universe that neither Carroll (in his witty manner) nor Hofstadter could depict, a physical contemplation that defies what laws of Physics allow, and most of all, an intangible 'thing' so ambiguous and versatile, so mutidimensional and vague, that one might as well create a formula for god's existence while one is on the venture of discovering "I."

but even still, we cannot stop - you cannot stop. it is a nagging voice - decipherable or not! - and someone shall silence it someday, be it you, or me (ha), or any person further up the line.

i like it, i do, i do.

aye,

lustrum
http://www.lustrum.org
A labyrinthine tale of God.
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somnambulist Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002
Very experssive, and pure sadness within all of this.

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klf Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002
your words convey feelings so well, beautiful work !
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faithwalker Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002  Student Photographer
:) (Smile)

Faithwalker



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rajivmathur Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002
someone's had a huge impact on you ?
is it

'sutumrl' ?

that dosen't matter, it's great work.

rajiv--
tf. ts. ths.

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dexxa Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2002
i cannot stir
the depths of you
in the shallow of me


Sadness...

^_^ Miss deXXa wishes you a happy day ^_^
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