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Tess leaned against the tree, gazing at the green grass and listening to the birds chirp as Cassandra continued her lecture.

"Tess," Cassandra said in a soft yet strict voice.

Tess snapped back to reality and faced her mentor.

"You drifted off again," she said, disapprovingly.

"I'm sorry, Master," Tess said, apologetically.  "It's just that..."

Tess looked into Cassandra's eyes, unsure how she should say this.

"What is it, Tess?" Cassandra asked, her voice filled with concern.

"Never mind," Tess said shamefully, holding her head down.  "I'm ready to listen."

"Tess, part of your training includes being free to speak your mind," Cassandra encouraged.

"Well," Tess began, lifting her head back up hesitantly and putting her hand on her chest.  "I just don't see how these stories apply to me."

"These are stories about elves that fell from grace," Cassandra explained strictly, holding her finger up like a stern teacher.

"Master, I chose to use my magic to heal the sick and injured," Tess said, brushing her hair back as she gazed out into the horizon.  "How can any group with such pure intentions stray?"

Cassandra folded her arms under her chest and sighed.   "Tess, even elves with the best of intentions have been known to fall," she explained, keeping her eyes focused on her pupil.  "Magic runs through this world and only a lucky few can feel it in their blood.  However, with this power comes a great responsibility.  If we forget that, the magic will control us."

Tess stood straight up and walked to the river.  "I understand how someone who chooses to specialize in necromancy could fall, but I still don't see how it could happen to a healer."

Tess bent down to get a better look at the fish swimming peacefully in the river, unaware of the dangers that lurked above the water, or below it.  Despite all the beauty held in the river, it still gave off a faint reflection of the outside world, particularly Tess's reflection.  She saw her own tan oval shaped  face with eyes as blue as midnight gazing back at her.  The wind blew a few strands of her straight golden blonde hair, cascading all the way down to her waist, in front of her eyes.  Her modest white robes billowed in the wind .

"No specific type of magic is good or evil.  All that matters is how it's used," Cassandra explained.  "Apollo started out as a healer."

"Apollo's downfall was that he tried to take on too much," Tess rationalized, gazing with pity at the fish with an injured fin swimming in the river.  "I'm perfectly happy just being a healer."

Tess stroked the fish, healing the damage.  She smiled as she watched the fish swim away in perfect health.

"Tess, you don't—"

Tess felt a sharp pain in her head and put her hand on it, screaming as she fell to the ground.

"Tess!" Cassandra cried out, rushing to her side.

Just like that, the pain went away.

"Tess, are you all right?"

"Fine," Tess said, getting back on her feet.  "I think I felt something."

"What?" Cassandra asked in a slight panic.

"I don't know, it was just a strange presence and it only had one thought," Tess explained, rubbing her hand on her head.  "It's time."
The Danger Comes: Meet Candice

Update: I changed my mind.  Since posting original fiction doesn't ruin your chances of being published, I plan on posting the whole series.

I decided to post the prologue for my first story.  The only real problem I have with this prologue is that you can't tell that the story takes place in modern times.  Now, please understand, I plan on publishing this series one day so all I'm posting on here is rough draft excerpts.  If I post the whole thing, it couldn't ruin my chances of publishing it one day and I really don't want that to happen.  I'd like to thank :icondeniaelka-vip-kiril:, :iconxcherryxz:, :iconponylover43:, :iconstarbreese:, :iconskykun:, :icon19andmugsy:, :iconyumi-aelita:, :iconsotherin:, and :iconcute-luly: for watching me.
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onlyindreams145 Featured By Owner May 11, 2016
Great update
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner May 11, 2016
Thank you.
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Dark-Lina Featured By Owner May 11, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
For me sounds good ^^ i wait for more
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner May 11, 2016
Thank you!  I'm still editing the next chapter, but that's when I introduce Candice.
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onlyindreams145 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
Poor Tess that sounds like it really hurt
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
Thank you. I really appreciate you giving this story attention. Funny thing is my mom also read both chapters for the first time this morning.
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AlicedelMar Featured By Owner Edited Jul 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi, liked the piece of history, but as a tip when you think development must substantiate well your vision between elf and gods, I mean, Greek mythology is clearly understood for most people, we have an idea them names, monuments, an immediate view of the subject, for this is a little weird link an elf, not saying it's wrong, it's your vision, your own world and if you explain well see no problem.

   The text creates an atmosphere, clearly it understands the thought of Tess.Clap 

  I hope this is understood, my English is very bad.


Sweating a little... 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015
I think I can make out most of what you say.  Actually, they're not really elves as we understand it.  It's just what they call themselves.  The Gods are also not really Gods as they are magical bullies.  Think that episode of Star Trek: The Original Series, when Apollo showed up.  Of course, this is assuming you watch Star Trek.

Thank you.  I'm still working on this.
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AlicedelMar Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok.:) (Smile) 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015
Thanks, so Tess seems alive to you?
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AlicedelMar Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Sí! Yo no puedo entender del todo tu idioma, pero la descripción de la escena me pareció clara.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015
Yeah, I should tell you.  The only language I speak is english.  I could use free translations, but that would just turn out what garbled.
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AlicedelMar Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
When I read the story, I saw the description of the scene, the atmosphere, somewhat philosophical question of the character, the feeling ...
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015
Thank you. I hope you feel the same about Candice and Chris.
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Blackbutler123x Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2015  Student Digital Artist
wow this is awesome! I need to change tess's bangs!! happy cry XD Panda Emoji-23 (Cry) [V2] 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2015
Thanks, but that was a dollmaker.  I prefer you use my description in the story for your drawings and not what I recreate, because dollmakers are NOT 100% accurate.  Just follow my description and you'll do fine.
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susanspringguardian Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be sure to look for this book. Will you post when it's published?
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015
I'm not really thinking that far ahead.
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susanspringguardian Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Ah. I understand. I'm trying to write original novels too. It gets tiresome to write them sometimes. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015
Plus, when I get really into something, I tune out the rest of the world.
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susanspringguardian Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, me too.
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susanspringguardian Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I get distracted by the Animorph books. And Kingdom Keepers books. And Magic Tree House. Pretty much any book  I get a hold of. 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2015
So do I. Then I get other distractions so I don't finish the ones I have.
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starbreese Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very interesting teaser ^^ (I'm working on an original novel too ;))
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2015
Thank you!
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starbreese Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome ^^
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cute-Luly Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Huggle! Heart 
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015
Thank you.
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Yumi-Aelita Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Wow this is really good I can't wait to read the published one and it's no problems watching you
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015
If you want to see more of what I have planned, check out my Original Fiction Folder with the subfolder of Greek God Fiction.
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015
Thank you!  I'm a little afraid people might think this takes place a long time ago and not in the present.  Maybe this is a little presumptuous but, if you're interested, I have a journal entry explaining how you can create a character for it.  I'm afraid it won't be showing up anywhere in my original fiction.
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Yumi-Aelita Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
No worries can you link it to me
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suburbantimewaster Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015
The link's on my deviantart ID
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Yumi-Aelita Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Found it
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