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HB18

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I'm really liking this so far, but I have to make a few suggestions, the first one being here... =)

There should be some indication of the passage of time between the first panel of this page and the last of the previous. Usually in manga this is done by a long, blank rectangular panel, or a few of them becoming smaller, thinner, or further apart.

Some examples: [link] [link]

Second suggestion: Page navigation links please! :blush: Whether you list an index for links to all pages, a next/back, or a next/start, it would make it much easier to go from one page to the next.

Thirdly: Since this manga seems to be read from right to left, you might want to make note of such. I know traditional manga is read from right to left because it's originally drawn/written in Japanese, but when it's originally drawn/written in English the natural tendency would be to read from left to right, which causes confusion when the panels seem to be out of order.


Those things aside, your art is gorgeous and I absolutely love your outfit designs. ^_^ You can has a new fan. :D