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Glaring over at him,
I see his face.
Looking intently at his test,
concentrating hard
Knowing what is important in life.

Staring at him.
Not conscious of what I am doing.
Not realizing that he might notice.
Become entranced into deep thoughts.

Will he ever figure it out?
Saying this in my head with deep sorrow.
Will he ever know the truth?
Feeling guilt and sadness over come me.
How can he ever figure out the truth if I keep myself locked up inside?

I canít open the gates.
I donít have strength to open them.
Treating him like he is nothing.
Treating him as though he is my nuisance.
But he isnítÖ

I hope one day I can show that I am not a mean cold hearted person.
I want to show that I have compaction and love.
That day will never come.
Knowing we will be separated.
Knowing he will never come back.

Someone calls my name.
I Shack out of my daze and joining the world again.
I become myself.
The person I have always beenÖ
The person I donít want to be.
This poem shows alote of feelings I had tords one person at one point in my life. Sad part is.. I probably wont see him again.
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Vonapets Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2005
Theres nothing left to say that others havent... Superb:D
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StormyArdor Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2005
thank you :hug:
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Soulswipe Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2005
Heh ive had that happen to me a few times unfortunatly i wasnt savvy enough to catch onto the fact that they were interested in me, oh well. Anyway its very good you have a strong base here, a few minor corrections and it would be wonderful. Good job and keep it up
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StormyArdor Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2005
mm :shrug: thank you for the comment. I know the poem isnt all that wonderful and it needs some work with it. I am going to work on it more and maybe put up a secound version if I am not too lazy haha. nope he never catched on.. I have known him for 10 years too.. its kind of sad.. oo well..thanks again :)
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Soulswipe Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2005
I do like it, its a good poem hehe just want ya to do better, ya know?
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StormyArdor Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2005
mm yes. I do hope I improve more.
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puppyluvor Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2005
thats really really good. i really can relate. ^_^
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StormyArdor Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2005
thank you... :).. I think a lot of people can relate to this sadly..
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AellaWind Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
:aww: That's a really cute and sad poem... I can think of a few ways to make it better though... :shrug:

It's really good though... it's heartfelt! Huzzah. I love it.
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StormyArdor Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
THank you :glomp: .. I know its :sad: ..but its what I felt. I love poems with lots of emotion. very heartfelt indeed.
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GregKrk Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
don't know what to say, really amazing.
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StormyArdor Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
Thank you :hug: .. I worked alote on this one and edited it alote. I am glad that it all came out good. :)
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