I think that's a solid critique. I personally am bewildered by the long knitted scarf and or sweater. It presents the subject in a package which is interesting but cuts across the natural curves of her shape and black top. A tighter crop may have had the same effect. The eyes being semi hidden isn't bad except that she has gorgeous eyes that makes me wonder why hide them unless it's an extension on the title 'hold on to you' as in keeping a fixed gaze in her mind. I would suggest a slightly darker and redder lipstick to pop out her pretty lips instead of the flesh beige color. Super portrait - beautiful girl - well done!!
I don't know... I find her eye to be a kaleidoscope of beautiful greens, golds, blues and browns which are indeed mesmerizing. Her eyelashes are just awesome. Long dark, just gorgeous and not full of makeup. There are a couple of technical things that bug me. First the white of they eye has gone to the scary point for me - too white. Second and most annoying is the light reflection that creates an odd geometric shape with hard angles that look like a reflected building plus there is a weird blue glow growing towards the left out of the pupil. This is a gorgeous eye that should be redone to compliment it's true beauty - IMHO.
It's been sung that "Every picture tells a story...". This is certainly true in this case. The girl's innocent quizzical look initially pulls you past her eloquent blue velvet hooded cloak straight into her piercing gaze. That in itself is a feat that few portrait artists can accomplish without being distracted by obscure elements and surroundings. The fact that she is purposefully slightly out of focus begins to unravel her story. She is a traveler, we are spectators who have been caught together in the same moment and allowed a glimpse of beauty moving through time. We have been acknowledged by her glance and asked "why". Why do we stare, why do we care, why do our eyes return to hers then seek more details in her hair? her lips? her cloak? her mouth poised as though if we listen hard enough we'll hear her voice? Cleverly the story teller and photographer has blurred these images because she's already gone from the moment. She has passed us by, leaving us wanting clarity and answers that sadly cannot be had. Can you see the genius working now? This image cannot be judged by a casual glance or by a systematic breakdown of the standard teachings on how to take portraits. This artist had a vision, a theme, a gorgeous model and executed her plan to perfection. It takes a lot of planning and skill to produce high quality emotive images that can portray and illicit lingering feelings like this one does. I am very very impressed and love this work beyond adequate expression.
Vision: Arwen Evenstar, in LOTR. Are they not sisters? - 5 Technique: The tones and lighting are natural and well managed - 5 Originality: Done before but not w/her youthful beauty. Not this well - 5 Impact: Absolutely stunning and haunting - 5