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souls are high kites with holes, the sky is like a crystal ball



Blue sky harrow:
How lost for adjectives
Are we
To break our fast up there
Sugar, tea, and birdsong?

Of course, kites, souls
Curiosities, wind being free
While we, ground strung Gullivers
Flat beneath the
Colossal eye

We're watchers
Of the wolcen burnspot
Pupil paling
West, always

What do I call myself?
My sex deliquesced
An epicene, I'm a lover of honey bees
And toadstools

With plume
For tongue,
Duck-green;
A curling fern:
We slip around like
Chartreuse chimera
In Lilliput ponds.

We dive in as
The tadpoles stop
Tail-motor
To blend
Eyeless
At the empty
Arms
Of an underwater statue-

Arms like levers:
Blackening the coats
And peeling back
Crystal tortoise-shells;
Stripping time of
Itself –

We see the sky
Where it is skyless;
It remains an opal;
Patternless and
Dug-out:

A sunken
Treasure
In the bowl
Of your
Soul.
a collaboration with :iconnightgrid:

enjoy!
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souls high kites with holes by *thetaoofchaos is a collaborative piece with *NightGrid, showing us what two voices can become when combined. Get a good poet-friend and try collaborating, too! ( Featured by fllnthblnk )
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TestdummyChainz Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2018  Professional Interface Designer
So they Reaper what they sew.
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ersatz-moon Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A sunken
Treasure
In the bowl
Of your
Soul.
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spoems Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012   Writer
i've always liked that line. *NightGrid wrote that one. did you mean say something about it?
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ersatz-moon Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i like the rhyme in that, i like how carefree and simple it sounds, but i also like how soul is compared to a bowl, as if the soul could be filled up with something
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spoems Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012   Writer
Cool! Thanks for offering your thoughts on it.
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ersatz-moon Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
like its loneliness could be filled up with something better
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spoems Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012   Writer
agreed. we are all pockets of loneliness looking to be filled up with something better. it seems strange that others can fill us up with the same stuff as we had to begin with and somehow that makes life bearable.
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ersatz-moon Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah somehow it seems as if our soul doesn't have the capacity to hold all the emotion we feel and we need to release and share it, somehow. they fill us with the same philosophy we had to begin with. but being able to identify with others just makes everything okay.
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spoems Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   Writer
True, we do tend to seek identity and even validation through others. :hug:
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Shairese Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, wow.

Lovely.
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spoems Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012   Writer
thanks. :heart:
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SnowmenLikeToWrite Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012  Student General Artist
"We slip around like
Chartreuse chimera"

This is one of a multitude of passages I could single out for fullness of effect, you have such command of language, I wish I we're better at supplying constructive criticism since there is always a measure of space for improvement and/or growth, maybe I just find something worthwhile in most works and neglect the aspects that could use development or nurture, anyway I truly love this piece top to bottom and your work has become an inspiration as of late.

While I'm indulging:

"Pupil paling
West always"

One of the personal truths that I subscribe to is nuance and subtlety, a wise adage in me always says that less is more, although sometimes indulgence leads to thrilling places, I've found over the years that the more you take away from a particularly gregarious phrase the more gravity and application it seems to radiate.

I appreciate the way your able to convey so much with just the right about of actual content.

Again, well done.
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spoems Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012   Writer
thanks so much for all your praise and commentary. i'm actually glad to say that i cannot take full credit for the entirety of this poem, as i collaborated with my good friend *NightGrid on this. she shares my love of poetic abstraction as a form of truth, explanation of the world through the ideal, and for allowing the reader to make their own concrete connections while coloring in the invisible lines.

i know what you mean about nuance. i think it's the key to poetry, the appearance of words taking on impossible density and depth that was never afforded them from mere dictionary reference.

:heart:
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artistic-foolishness Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The beginning reminded me of Learning to Fly by Pink Floyd,
then the second half took on a life of its own...
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spoems Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011   Writer
we appreciate your comments. Thanks!
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artistic-foolishness Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:) You're welcome!
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
This is wonderful! A seamless collaboration. Congrats to both of you :)
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spoems Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011   Writer
we thank you and appreciate the reading!
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
Great work...:)
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neuroticmnemonic Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011   Writer
A very well-deserved DD. You two did awesome. I love the word choice and imagery.
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spoems Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011   Writer
thanks for saying so. We appreciate it. :)
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pixieplay Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
With plume
For tongue,
Duck-green;
A curling fern:
We slip around like
Chartreuse chimera
In Lilliput ponds.


This is probably my favourite part in this piece, but the whole poem is just filled to the brim with delicious diction. :heart:
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spoems Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011   Writer
thanks so much! We appreciate your reading. :)
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TheMadMulatto Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011
:wow:

Love this. Every last little detail.
An optical delight on the ride down, as well. :D
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spoems Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011   Writer
Thanks so much! We very much apreciate that and the read. :)
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TheMadMulatto Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011
My pleasure. :)
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TornStitches Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011
wow, it's so great to read something from someone with "the voice", who "gets" the art of constructing word-pattern skyscrapers and palaces. this is good stuff!
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spoems Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2011   Writer
thanks so much! we both really appreciate that. :)
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TornStitches Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2011
yes, sorry I should have phrased that a little differently, as it was a collaboration. both your efforts resulted ina really well-constructed piece!
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spoems Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2011   Writer
:) so glad you think so.
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Humanisms Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous!
The imagery is astounding, and I love the flow.

Gonna stalk the rest of your pieces now. Watch out.
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spoems Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011   Writer
thanks so much, we appreciate that.

hehe, ok, i'll be careful. :)
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pretty-yin Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010  Student Writer
I have so few words for this! Totally deserving of the DD it received, and I'm glad I took a look at it!
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spoems Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010   Writer
we really appreciate that! :hug:
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Keeeenny Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2010
Wow, it's so expressive and beautiful!
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spoems Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2010   Writer
thanks so very much! :)
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velvetlea Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on the DD ... and I can see why - thank you for sharing this so that we could feel it too ...
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spoems Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2010   Writer
thanks! i'm glad you were around for me to share it with you. :)
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velvetlea Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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InDiscord Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2010
Lyrical, jeweled...and there are more adjectives where those came from.
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spoems Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2010   Writer
we thank you for that and for reading. :)
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hell-on-a-stick Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010  Professional Writer
nice work.
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spoems Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010   Writer
we thank you.
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hell-on-a-stick Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2010  Professional Writer
glad to see you're still dancing.
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Masa-chan Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010
I apologize for being late, but the last two stanzas cut me to the marrow.

It's beautiful.
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spoems Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2010   Writer
thanks so much! we both appreciate that. :)
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PrettyCrazy Featured By Owner May 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Ladies and gentlemen, I think we have found the awesomest collab team on dA and far beyond.
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spoems Featured By Owner May 18, 2010   Writer
awwww, hehe - that is way too kind! we appreciate it. i'm just glad i can only take a fraction of the credit! :)
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PrettyCrazy Featured By Owner May 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I know better. ^^
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one-dryad Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:worship:
I particularly love:

Sugar, tea, and birdsong?

Wholehearted congratulations to you both! :clap: :hug:
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