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Haven't draw him for a while.. so here's Sasuke.
I kinda miss this emo guy :D


Practicing painting style. I'm stuck for the background :P
Please do criticize me if something in this artwork bothers you.
I really want to hear some feedback ^^

I shouldn't do this because of my job's deadline, buuut.. drawing fanart is a very nice way to building my screwed mood.. (forgive me, boss!)

for SASUSAKU version of this pic : [link]


Uchiha Sasuke (c) Kishimoto Masashi
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kunai-tasora's avatar
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Love the realism of Sasuke and the hawk matched with the noveau background. Especially the symbolizism of the cloak and moon with blue.

Only suggestion is maybe mute the back ground to a lighter hue or maybe make it glassy around the main subject. Since the background is sharp and the character isn't, I see the background before I see the main character.

Or if you look at old Japanese painting, make a tan overlay on the background so the colors get toned a bit and it may emphasize the subjects more...

Just a thought but still a great piece!
paellamagi's avatar
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

The composition of this piece is lovely, I really enjoy the relaxed wavy lines that draw your eye to the centre of the image. The shading looks natural and accurate. It does look as if you have brought these anime characters into a more, if not fully realistic setting (there are still stylised elements such as hair and eyes, which is certainly not a bad thing at all).

However, I feel that the background could use more work. The sharpness of the background compared to the softness of the characters looks unnatural. I feel my eye is being drawn to those rather than the intended focus of the art work. If you choose to repaint the background, I'd suggest that the red and the yellow be a little closer to brown so they do not take all of the viewer's attention.

It may also be an idea to play with the characters shirt colour. I find it kind of blurs into the birds feathers. Maybe a bluish-grey tinge may be helpful. But it depends on the lighting circumstances too. Maybe take a look at the effects of different coloured lights on a white shirt. However, I am not a fan of Naruto so I do not know if this is a regular outfit the character wears like Homer Simpson's blue pants and white shirt. But remember, this is fan art - you do have the opportunity for experimentation).

All this criticism does not mean I dislike the piece however! I absolutely love the bird. I think that with practice and further experimentation with this colouring style, your art could improve a lot. If you think about the textures of the surfaces you are trying to recreate, I am sure you could do great things. If I am to be completely honest, I currently prefer your earlier works that still have line work, but I can see potential here. I think it often a challenge losing the safety of visible inking, but if anyone can overcome it, it's you. <img src="e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile)" />
NakamuraKaito's avatar
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

Seeing that Sauske is one of my favorite characters from Naruto I was instantly drawn to this piece. The detail is left loose and not defined...I love it, the looseness of the strokes give this piece it's feel. The hawk is a key part of Naruto seeing as that is Sasuke's group's name..The Hawk or Taka aka 鷹 So I love the hawk.

I was reading the other critique...and they awarded you 2.5 stars for originality. I feel you deserve more, though not an original character you have presented in a new idea and style. So therefore I award you 4 stars.

Now the Background is what I think should have some alteration. The colours do not work...for me....I think it you removed the Akatsuki clouds and put the blue grandular background for the entire background. The blues would compliment the whites , browns, and blues. Um I'm not sure what the yellow object is I'm assuming it's a moon....but I feel that it should be either moved to a new area or removed all together...*just a suggestion you don't have to do it if you don't want to...but it doesn't work for me compisitionally speaking...My art teacher says that a background that isn't planned and just put in, looks like a background that is thrown in there and not planned...If that makes sense..... and if you plan on keeping that background you should use the same strokes you used to paint Sasuke and the hawk. But do it in a sense that doesn't take away from the point of emphasis.

Well, I hope I don't sound like a jerk and that it helps you out.

Wonderful Job and keep up the good work.

-Till Later
Kaito
sorceressmyr's avatar
thank you so much!

yeah, many criticized the background, I know ^__^".. I also feel it doesn't match Sasuke and the hawk alone.. since I was planning it to be the sasusaku piece. (the akatsuki cloud to match sakura's hair)..

You give me a wonderful idea for the background.. and maybe I'll fix it later :)

again, thank so much for the critics and suggestion! :hug:
NakamuraKaito's avatar
well no problem i enjoy helping where i can
Goten0040's avatar
:star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

I can definitely see a great amount of effort in this piece. The brushstrokes are very well aligned with the facial structures, and the hawk on Sasuke's shoulder adds a lovely amount of contrast of warmer browns verses the cool pale of the skin and black of the hair. Sasuke, of course, is not exactly the most original topic, considering Naruto is so insanely popular that it's hard to look at the front page without seeing it, and the background doesn't fit with the drawing at all. I would have rather seen it on a plain white background rather than the patterns that are provided. They're distracting and unnecessary. The painting of Sasuke itself is eye catching enough.
sorceressmyr's avatar
thank you so much!
I'll try better next time :hug:
radiatingeyez's avatar
Hey this is really pretty! both Sasuke and the hawk are.
Do you have tumblr maybe, where you post your art?
If you don't may I share it on mine? With credits, of course. It's ok if you don't want to, I only post art with the artists' permission. My url is avenger-hawk.tumblr.com.
Thank you.
aiNOshi's avatar
Wonderful! *3*
navyed's avatar
awsome! :D I love Your pictures! XD
PinkGirl123's avatar
wow i love it ;3
ceCy-DoJnana's avatar
i agree with lilypipo for the background, but Sasuke and the hawk are amazing
llCrimsonRosell's avatar
Lilypipo's avatar
Sasuke and the hawk are amazing, but the background... well... I think you should make it a hazy forrest, or just black. Now it kind of ruines the picture. Sorry! (You did ask for critque, so here it is ;))
thraxey's avatar
its great i love it....sorry i took so long to replie
Avigail-Natsumi's avatar
WOW!! AMAZING!!! O.O
you've passed a lot! :D

CONGRATULATIONS! ;D


mattane ^^
Av!nat ;P
Zizo47's avatar
Damn! thats reeeaalllyyy good O_O
Wow, im speechless.
bk27's avatar
wooow its kind of perfect....i love it.. the coloring...the disign...love it
moeT-moeT's avatar
mirrrrr lama ga liat kerjaan elo, tau2 brubah gini style paintingnya :D
bagus mir, cuma entah kenapa kok mata gue menuju ke elangnya ya dibanding sasukenya? ^^;
sebenernya kalo diperhatiin sih sasukenya udah cukup detail, tapi apa gara2 ada bagian2 yang tingkat blurrynya mirip2 sama si elang, jadinya agak compete ya? :|
eniwei masalah BG, gue agree sih sama kritik yang di atas.
in a way terlalu dominan, jadinya compete buat attention gitu =)
mungkin warnanya bisa dimuted down dikit? =)

nice piece though, didnt think would see this kinda painting style from u hun! :D
sorceressmyr's avatar
salahin si dimas :iconvalidangel: yg ngeracunin gwa sama non-lineart style mut :D

huhu.. makasih kritiknya mut...
iya emang pgn gwa ubah BG-nya nanti ^__^, makasih usul2nya yah :D

masa elangnya lebih 'tertangkep'? padahal gwa bikin elangnya super asal, hahahaha...
mut.. rencana colabs kita gimana atuh? hahaha
desember udah lewat jauh nih :D
Annerhcp's avatar
Gorgeous. I like both this version and the one with Sakura. The only thing that bothers me are the akatsuki clouds, the lines don't flow like all the others.
:heart:
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