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stars and waves
lap at my breasts

sighing with cold
a small shriek/laugh/shiver
and a small wind
shrieks/laughs/shivers
at our shuffling/stumbling
learning to ride the dark

cold |as truth| reaching across
our little divisions
water to water
seizing nerves,
and cells,
and words...
i love swimming, at night, in the ocean, when the temperature drops... 35-45 degrees... (this is florida, that's as cold as it gets). it's been awhile though....
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ashrei-halom Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2004   Photographer
Wonderfully done... love the use of the e.e. cummings-like style. Gives the poem an almost playful or teasing feel to it... kudos :)
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soulwrai Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2004
very well written you def. write a ton better than I do
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solstice Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2002   Writer
this is a beautiful poem
i love the analogy between the water and innocent love - that's how i see it anyway
lovely
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deejbard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2002
stars and waves
lap at my breasts


so gorgeous ...
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deezaster Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2002
what a clever little poem... swimming at nightputs you in a complete world of your own..

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Great Poem i loved it...
Dee
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frail Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2002  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this makes me extremely cold
I suppose that's good
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neural-shock Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2002
swimming at night seems a wonderful thing, judging from your words... :) (Smile)

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