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Deep below the ocean
All is hushed and desolate
They are gone from my sight
Forever consumed by IT

One by one they vanished
And all was destroyed
With nothing to hold IT back
Death filled the void

Before their hearts soared
And they swam clear and free
But all hope faded
When the Darkness consumed the sea

I am alone with the ocean on my shoulders
And it will be my turn next
The Darkness will come
I can already feel ITs effects

The Darkness will be here soon
Endlessly IT searches for me
And with no chance of escape
I wait patiently

I look to the ebony surface
And see IT has come
Greasy tenticals constrict around me
But I do not try to run

I knew IT would come for my life
And I knew I could not flee
ITs reach is limitless
And would find me eventually

With one final glance to the surface
And my last, dying breath,
I watch as the Light is swallowed
By the blackness of Death

Now the ocean is empty
And there is no light
And by ITs greedy hand
Day became eternal Night
Perhaps you've seen the image shown in the preview. If you have you know that it is my entry in to the 2010 oil spill awareness contest. I wanted to make it special so I decided to write a poem that reflected how I felt when I was creating my entry. Now, please don't judge to harshly, this is my first poem. I would like to know how I did though.
If you would like to view the image more closely, here is the [link]
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LAvenus79 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very moving
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww, thank you so much! This was my very first poem so I'm grateful to hear it touched you :)
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ministreetmaster Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010  Student General Artist
Featured here: [link] :blowkiss:
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you sooo sooo much i really appreciate it!!
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ministreetmaster Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010  Student General Artist
:huggle:
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itrickytricky Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you. This poem just took the words right out of my head.
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Really!? thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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itrickytricky Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
It really voiced everything I've been feeling about the whole spill, not to mention all the after effects for the years to come. I'm just a big nature girl, I can't help it. :clap: but thanks. lol
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for saying so! It was my first poem and i'm glad that it was able to express so much to you!
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foxonfire2322 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
love that really emotive
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BleedingHeart2010 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010
I'm scared... It's the nice use of poetry that really made it! :clap:
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
haha thank you so much! I'm so glad you like it, cause i was so nervous when i posted it because it's my very first poem...
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BladedMako Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010
Eek, this poem gives me chills.
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Chills in the best way I hope :3 Thank you!
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TaylorMayedQueenie Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
wow..... this is really deep.....
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Im glad you like it!
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xLoveLifex Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
Oh man. That was really good. Really strong images and message. :)
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww thank you so much for saying so!! I was so nervous when i posted it because it was my first one, but people seem to like it so i think i'm going to be writing some more soon!
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xLoveLifex Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
You're more than welcome! :D I'll definitely keep an eye out for anything else you write in the future!
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! And please do! I'd be interested to hear your thoughts on any future pieces! :]
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shadowgeist Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010
I love the beautiful imagery. You definitely have talent. :)
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Really! You think so? I was so nervous when i posted it....
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shadowgeist Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010
For real, it's beautiful.
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww! Thank you so much! I really appreciate you saying so!
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CelestinaGrey Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I got chills.
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Really?! Do you like it? I mean, im just really nervous about it because its my first poem and all
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CelestinaGrey Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I do! It's very good, I'm a writer and so I know good writing when I see it. It's your first poem, and it is purely excellent! Great job! I see your talents don't lie only in your artistic abilities. =)
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwww thank you so much! I'm very glad you approve! And i wanted to thank you for suggesting me for a feature! I really appreciate it!
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CelestinaGrey Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!
And once again, you are very welcome! =D I just liked your stuff so much, you have so much talent, you just HAVE to get some proper recognition!
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Slightly-Spartan Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Well it's people like you who really help me get that recognition! My first 4 months on here i only had 300 pageviews...
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CelestinaGrey Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad I can help =)

I know what you mean. I've found many great artists who don't have many pageviews, so I try to put them out there in the DA world as much as I can!
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