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He plucks a bitter C note
on a two hundred year old violin
that belonged to his mother,
his grandmother,
and her grandmother.

The strings have never fallen flat before.
I was lucky enough to stumble across this contest: [link] on time. Brevity is like, my thing ;) 30 words exactly.
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MoonlightWillow6 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012   Writer
Brevity is indeed, "your thing". (your fifty-five word stories prove that) It's amazing how you can make a story out of so few words. This piece is no exception. Nice work! :)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I do my best :)
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh, what an anvil that last line is. I was expecting something different, even given that opener, but I like it.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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sunflowerb Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Once again you have proven you are the Undisputed Queen of Concise.

I want to hug the character from this. My grandmama taught music and plays like ten instruments, and she tried to teach me violin and piano and I was never very musically inclined. (Ah well. I'm the only person in my family who can draw better than a stick figure, so it works out. XD )

And it's a "bitter C note" so clearly the poor dear is not too pleased with not having inherited his families talent. And it was intentional, I suppose, that he is a "he" on a violin mastered by generations of women. ;)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:bow:

Everyone else seems to be finding a lot more meaning in this one than I got out of it - I threw it together in ten minutes and didn't even think about it :XD: Once again, I learn I don't know my audience as well as I think I do.
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sunflowerb Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
As I have learned from critiques in art school, if you get complimented on something, never point out it was an accident. You may have gotten that great texture by spilling coffee on the paper, but once you get complimented on it, it has suddenly become intentional. XD
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My head isn't that big :P I like happy accidents.
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sunflowerb Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
It's not so much big headedness as just making sure you present your strengths, at least in art critiques. It'd be really funny, because the teacher would point out something good, and you'd start to say you did that on accident, and she'd keep interrupting with "It looks really good. It looks really good. Hey,that was a great choice." *wink wink*. Of course, the idea behind that is that if you're presenting something to a client, and they like something, you want them to think you're competent, so you don't exactly want them to know that all of their favorite parts were accidents.
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I disagree with your teacher then. You can present your strengths without lying about them. I dislike this piece and didn't put much effort into writing it, but others have found something greater in the words - I consider that a strong point.
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speckledflame Featured By Owner May 10, 2012   Writer
Guess inheriting an instrument doesn't always mean you inherit the talent to master it, does it? :)

I think this was a pretty good, concise reading. I also noted how the subject is male and all his violinist ancestors are women, something I am not sure if it was written on purpose but sorta gets my imagination going into the realms of maybe-he-would-play-the-violin-better-if-he-were-a-woman-so-this-can-mean-he-wants-to-become-a-woman-as-he-feels-trapped-on-a-men's-body. :giggle:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed :nod:

Not even I've thought that far into my own writing, but I guess you could read it that way it you wanted to :XD:
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speckledflame Featured By Owner May 12, 2012   Writer
I do love looking for multiple meanings inside a brief piece :P

In any case, congratulations for the honourable mention!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
I look at this, and then I look at what I'm planning on submitting... There's no competition. You're so much better. DX
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
We'll see, we'll see. I'll be keeping an eye out for your submission now ;)
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
I just submitted it. If you would be so kind as to at least say your opinion (I know it's rather rude to ask someone to critique it when they're in the same contest as you), I'd appreciate it. :)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't mind :D
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner May 6, 2012
Thanks! ^-^
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 3, 2012
Wonderful! I wish you luck in the contest. Definitely like this better than mine. :D
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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Honor2Serve Featured By Owner May 1, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Oh wow! I love this! And that contest looks fun! I hope you don't mind if I join in :)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think anyone will mind unless you beat them ;)
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Honor2Serve Featured By Owner May 1, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
LOL! Well, I doubt that, but it's still fun :D I like yours better.
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012   Writer
You are really good at making the most out of a tiny word count.

...Actually, I think I first met you through SWS last year. :giggle:

This is beautiful. So full of meaning, with so few words. You are amazing. :D
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Probably, as SWS is what got me to start being active on dA :D Glad you enjoyed!
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner May 2, 2012   Writer
Well, I'm really glad you did! I love your work. :la:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you kindly :heart:
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner May 2, 2012   Writer
Sure :aww:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
there's a feeling of sadness in this poem, i don't know. it's as if he inherited the violin but not the skills of the previous owners. it's beautiful. :bow:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You hit the nail on the head :D
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i did? then i'm right about the feeling that this poem is pretty sad. :bow:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed you are :)
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
before i go to sleep, i just want you to know that you're good at brevity and i wish it were my thing too. thirty words, congratulations! :bow:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :meow: It's one of those things you just have to develop a knack for - once you've got it, it's not too difficult really :D
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012
This is very sweet. :heart: I'm not a musician, so I'd like to ask- with the last line, is it saying that the strings are flat now, or...?

Also, I'll have to write something for this contest! :D Sounds like a great challenge for me, as I'm trying to work on being concise. ^-^
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yep, though there's an implication that it might mean more. Metaphorical stuff~

Have fun :D
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012
Okay... XD

I will! :D
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