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UPDATE: I'm sorry for extra week. but RL has been getting in the way. what with my car needing to be repaired etc etc. I'll make it up with a 3 week run of comics rather than the usual 2.
You had a good conflict going here. It's just unfortunate that you didn't push it all the way. Both Grace and Celestia are in the wrong here. Celestia get's her due but Grace does not. That what happens later is because Grace failed as a mother.
I do think you should add a slightly higher element of seriousness to this. Not evil overlords or anything like that but that when a character messes up they will get reprimanded for it.
Grace's father is a scientist so failure would be something he knows all too well. While Celestia has developed somewhat Grace herself hasn't.
It would have been better if Grace struggled more to be a good mother. Had her ups and downs. Moments where she felt like a failure and where she doubted herself.
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