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She's gorgeous period.

This has to be a guy. notice how the color changes from the breast area to the neck. they make breast plates for us trans people to make your chest seem bigger. I have a good feeling this a cosplay of a cute girl, but a guy is the cosplayer, and yalll got played for 6 years xD. also, the placement of his arm could be to cover his family jewels. Just a hunch

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VISION:
You're a girl in a bikini. Big fucking deal. Human animals are so easily duped into "appreciating" the exact same thing over and over and over. I've seen literally thousand of girls standing around in bikinis. What about this vision is meant to stand out?

ORIGINALITY:
This shit convinces me more and more that photography is not art. I'm sorry to the model, because you are physically attractive, but isn't that the entire point? "Here's another hot girl in a bikini, do you like my photos yet?"

TECHNIQUE:
The lighting is decent. The white flowers go with the white bikini, go figure. It's not terrible from a production standpoint, but there is nothing going on, either.

IMPACT:
I have never felt compelled to write such a negative critique, but I am fucking sick of seeing this picture in my daily feed. Maybe I have too high of expectations for humanity.

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Of course, the artist is free to reject this critique if they can't handle the truth.

Sincerely,
Someone not mind-controlled by their dick.
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This is not art. Taking a picture of yourself half naked is insulting and sultry. Very innapropriate if a child sees this. Also this will hurt people that are not as skinny as you are. THIS IS VERY OFFENSIVE PLease please understand that not everybody wants to go onto deviantart and see this. You are a very pretty girl that should be covering up for!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am insulted ugh ugh ugh guh!!! I'm sorry for ranting, but I am a feminist, and I belive that this is very against women!!! Sorry that I may have offended you darling. But really.

Get over it. Geez.

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OH MY GOD i never realised i posted this, i was literally 12 years old and i posted this mocking people thinking I was funny, this is gross EWEW i havent logged on here for literal years.

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I think I understand the vision. A beautiful girl in white, with white flowers behind her. Her pale skin compliment the scene and the sunshine gives her the presence of an angel. That vision - 5/5 for me. I think it was understandable, makes sense, and is an excellent concept.

Your originality is pretty good, but not great. I've seen similar scenes to this before, but usually in drawings and I don't recall one that really screams "this is cliche" to me (so that's good & why I gave a solid 3.5 stars).

Your photography technique could use a little work. The model's technique = spot on. She's beautiful, graceful smile, and excellent pose - nothing wrong there. The scenery needs cleaned up. It's a tad messy at the bottom and although I "almost" missed it, I still caught quite apparently. If you shot this better and moved it to a better location (same concept with / beautiful white flowers in the back / lighting / etc), then I would have to give you 5/5 probably entirely across the board. So, so close, but no cigar this time IMO.

The impact was pretty good. I was excited enough to post "Pretty" in the concepts and then even decided to write this critique. It has definitely earned my 3.5 stars for impact.

Excellent work. I will begin watching you now.
Leandroyepyep's avatar
great work totally agree with your critique is fair and well thouth
niqbee's avatar
This isnt a critique you fucking inbred retard.
rabbidrabbid's avatar
I'm sorry, but even though this is a pretty good picture, It doesn't deserve every star. The first review put it best. You're just trying to kiss up to the poster.
TheHappy3's avatar
This is a comment, not a critique?
TheHappy3's avatar
I ... I don't speak Spanish. I merely use the word 'que' for asking, sorry for the misunderstanding.
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I'm assuming that you're aiming for quite an innocent look for this shot, and overall I think you've achived it although the way you're holding you're hands looks a little awkward, relax your arms a little and rotate the hand that is behind so that the back of your hand is facing out like the front hand, that will look more natural. I like the strong side lighting (natural sun light) it gives a nice effect, although there are a few spots where the highlights have peaked and your hair is just white, but not too bad.

A little attention to detail too, the big bare patch in the hedge and the litter at the bottom could have possiblt been avoided by selecting a better section of the hedge and picking the litter and moving it out of the shot.

The crop at the bottom of shot is slightly too low, the feet are onlt half in the shot, as feet often look awrward in this style of shot, I'd suggest cropping just above the ankle. Also. try standing with legs crossed, it gives a nice shap in a full length shot like this, although the way you're standing there does work.

One final suggestion, and please don't be offended, but if you're comfortable with the idea, have you thought of shooting this as either a topless or artistic nude shot, as both the pose and you hve the right innocent look to make the shot work as a non-sexual and innocent nude.
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The best disguise for pedophiles has always been 'photographer'. 
chriswatsonphotograp's avatar
pedophile is a person who engages in sexual activity with children, the person who requested the above critique is not a child, she also thought I offered a 'fair' critique.
Slander and libel are offences committed when making untrue and harmful statements about an individual or organisation that can land you in court and paying substantial damages to the injured party, so if you would like to see me and any other photographer you would like to make unsubstantiated allegations against, please do carry on, I could do with an extra million or two!
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Also, a pedophile is a person who is sexually attracted to children. There doesn't need to be an action involved. 

edit: as you've blocked me from replying (probably to save face), I'll just add on to this one for your following reply:

Thank you, I'm atrocious at spelling. I feel better about myself, knowing that I now know how to spell 'amateur'.  
chriswatsonphotograp's avatar
Go away and buy yourself a dictionary you pathetic little man!
Also are you an amateur photographer or do you just like to take photos of electric motor parts (look up armature in the dictionary when you but one)
WrennAmethyst's avatar
I didn't accuse you of anything, I just made a statement. If you took it personally, that's all you. ;)

edit: as you've blocked me from replying (probably to save face), I'll just add on to this one for your following reply:

I'm just curious why you're so mad?
chriswatsonphotograp's avatar
Then why make that statement on my critique if you are not accusing me of being a pedophile!
You have been reported to admin now, so I suggest you shut up and leave!
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Hi there She-Wolf!

(Kipling had it, I think, with "The female of the species is more deadly than the male"?)

You asked for a critique, which to me meant more than a standard comment praising your adorability, so here you go!

Vision: Giving this image the title of "inner peace" while outdoors in a sensual white, probably bathed in the heady scent of jasmine and glorying in the gentle wash of the sunshine is cute; the entire image comes across as peacefully serene and very pretty, rather than pretentious or sanctimonious. The visible intent to the observer is a sly conveyance that inner peace can be found anywhere in anything; then at the same time, one looks at the image and cannot help but be entranced by your divine looks and flawless figure, as well. 5 stars.

Originality: Well....it's not. Billions of bikini pictures in back-yards everywhere, millions in front of flowers, thousands in front of jasmine in a white suit. The originality lies in YOU, to be sure, but this image.....isn't. 1.5 stars.

Technicality: You get two stars out of me all of the time for proper lighting; even in sunshine, this photo is well and properly lit to fully capture your body, face, and eyes without shadow - insta-kudos. Another half a star for keeping the 1/3-2/3rds rule on subject and color (2/3rds of the image from left to right and then bam, the subject! (And such a pretty subject!) - 2/3rds of the image from the bottom up and then bam, from darker green to brilliant white!) However, in technical terms, the flaws: the biggest one to me, as you included the rest of yourself framed so well, is cutting off your pretty feet - that would fall under "framing", I suppose - be aware of what's part of the picture and what's being "lost", whether deliberately or accidental. Having already TAKEN this photo and then looking back and thinking "ahhhhh, bugger, the feet!" - can lead to creative cropping after the picture image is taken - in this case, given other elements as well, I might have taken off the bottom part of the picture from 1/3rd of the way up the thigh from the knee - just about 2-3cm below your fingers. Leading to "the setting" - love the flowers, love the leaves, wouldn't have minded the diagonal brick border cutting down behind your legs, but that little garden light, mang. The "hole" in the jasmine isn't much of an issue, it can be artistically incorporated no matter what the plebeian stuff IN the hole is - in fact, having the hole in there can be another subtle reinforcement of "inner peace" - the "calm depths of the bush as opposed to the effulgent & bursting profusion of the flowers", kinda thing. That lamp, though, is another thing that would have been better served by creative cropping. As another Deviant reminded me some months back, any such cropping should come clearly before, or clearly after, a joint of the body - in your case, the knees are the critical joint, so above or below by 10-15cm - and with that lamp there, above is the better choice. Technically, your pose is adorable - the wistful clasp of hands and twist of arms in front of you expresses both longing and yet insecurity or vulnerability/"protect myself", your hips are offset slightly back, it looks like (or rather, the torso and chest and shoulders are offset forward), which adds depth to you, even just slightly, and the tilt of your head combines a yearning look with a gently sneaky smile - all good things. Any drawbacks in the pose? Mmmm...perhaps the right (your right) elbow - it's flexed too far inward while hte arm remains "outward" towards your center while joining that wistful hand-clasp - if you want to convey the "vulnerable inner arm" while doing that, try turning the entire right forearm over, so that the "soft underside" is exposed to the camera; this includes the hand - face the right hand palm vulnerably out towards the camera before layering/covering it with the left hand as a "protective" over-clasp. 2.5 stars.

Impact: Dazzling. I stare at photos (mine and others) all day during editing or discussion and yet your eyes grab me the instant I look at this picture; an "arresting gaze", I'd call it, noticeable even before the "sexy girl in bikini" or "flawless skin" or the setting. The "pure/innocent/peaceful/serene" aspect of a very cute WHITE bikini set into the same image as the white jasmine flower, which symbolizes purity & modesty, is the second "grab" factor, and does quite well. Only after both of those things and combinations are done luring the gaze does it REALLY register that there's a gorgeous girl scantily clad in a skimpy yet modest bikini in the image - well layered, I would say. The only drawback to the overall impact is the plebeian setting, which is really only driven home to the viewer by that bloody lamp. 4.5 stars.

All in all, if I had to combine and revise the score, 13.5/20 stars only rates 67.5% as a grade, but the killer TO that grade is the originality, which is hard to beat on your own sometimes, and the fillips to the technique. As a PERFECT example to how self-shot images can be original and technically sound, have a look at Shantia Veney's DeviantArt (shauntiamodel.deviantart.com/). No, this isn't a plug for you to go nude, that's a personal artistic decision. Her art is a mixed composition of professionally shot photos and selfies (she's also a photographer) and her selfies are un-freakin'-believable. While your image has the appearance of an "assisted selfie", or somebody snapping the picture for you ("hey sis/boyfriend, come outside and push the button for me, let's catch this suit and my mood!"), it can very easily be enhanced to gain "points" back in those lost areas, and raise the grade to "absolutely stunning"
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