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If only angels looked upon our love,
But how they’d smile, giggling at us,
At this, though common, sighing from above;

Beauty’s contained and found in all things just,
Delighting in the pomegranate’s seed,
For you alone the meaning’s not of lust,

For you, a mistress to your passion’s need,
Admitting vulnerability,
Have taken comfort following in my lead.

Through moments of joy and uncertainty,
Euphoria and pain become our worlds,
And we revel or cry in commonality;

At night, unfettered, lie we both unfurled
In nylon, silk, and satin ecstasy,
As the master-mistress in our thoughts we’re curled;

If only all life was such fantasy,
We’d still be standing high above the cove,
Instead, with trust our guide, we plunge towards destiny.
Given that I have never actually written a "normal" love poem, this one is no exception.
The perspective I was thinking of when I wrote this was an accepting relationship between a woman and a crossdresser (from the former's point of view). It probably is not representative (at all), it was merely an attempt.
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tiamat9 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005   Traditional Artist
It's very romantic and erotic. Beautifully descriptive words and the rhythm is quite elegant.
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HurriFour Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005  Student
hey! I missed your poetry .
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sharkoftheday Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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HurriFour Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2005  Student
No problem
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Trapt-Obsession Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005
Interesting, when I read this I have the feeling of a "birds eye view". :lol: Sorry if that's a little odd, but I like this, good job. :hug:
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sharkoftheday Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
No, its not odd, that was basically the perspective, although it is fairly fragmented into little pieces (almost a contradiction for a higher view). Thank you though.
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hezekiah Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005
Great choice with the perspective; "normal" love poems have a tendency to blow really hard, so I commend on your deviant ways. Excellent rhyme and excellent imagery as well... An all a round excellent poem.

:D
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sharkoftheday Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
I hope this does not turn into another everyone's favorite (I will yop myself to no end if that is the case). In all honesty, I am not sure about it, it seems like it was skimmed over hastily in adhering to form. However, I do love the quasi-lesbian feel it has. I woke up this morning and thought I should have written "traditional" in place of "normal," but its too late for that. But yeah, they are so much more fun to write and easier to relate to (at least for me).
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hezekiah Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2005
Poem's fine; flows perfectly, and you're right, a great feel to it. You can always change 'normal' to 'traditional' - just a simple edit button. Of course, I will know what was originally there; our only hope is that I can keep that secret quiet.

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