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RoleplayintheDark OC Ajay Kaur
Character Name: Ajay Kaur
Character Type: Hashashim
Nature/Demeanor:  Defender /Adherent
Organization: Order of Assassins (Modern Day)
Sex: Female
Age: 21
Character Description:
     A somewhat tall dark haired woman with a fair olive complexion, her dark chocolate brown eyes seem to always be moving, taking in the world around her.  She keeps her hair covered with a white colored turban.  Her other attire consists of a slightly oversized white and red hoodie, stone washed denim jeans and a good pair of running shoes. Her shoes look like she has been everywhere in them and probably stepped in plenty of curious things that a Mister Clean Eraser could not remove.  Otherwise, her clothing is clean and stain free.   When she moves her left arm, there seems to be something creating a slight bulge visible on her inner arm.  
Character History:
     Anna, Ajay's mother,  met  Sikandar, Ajay's father in India during Partitia
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High Tea on Glee Anselm
Summary: Tywyll Heliwr responds to an invitation to join other Fetch for High tea on Glee Anselm.  During her stay, she hears secrets shared by the other Fetch and shares some of her own.  This leads to a discussion about the dangers of both the Jedi and Sith factions potentially piercing Horizon in order to access the Far Umbra beyond, the perils of which are understood by all present.  Also, Loruna Ardenal ask Tywyll Heliwr if she believed the taint of Jhor was great enough on Darth Nebula to warrant him being marked and hunted.
:iconShadowwright: :iconsaysplz: Somewhere on Glee Anselm, in the remains of an old Anselmi structure, four Fetch came together for High tea.  One among their number was Tywyll Heliwr, accepting an invitation received quite fortuitously after her meeting with Tel'sar, Darth Nebula and Tharax on Oasis Station only days ago.   Tywyll Heliwr saw that they had all gathered around a fire and were sitting on fallen rubble.  To t
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The Kavosi Comes to Call (Roleplay Log)
Summary:  The Kavosi finally gets his opportunity to go interogate...interview  Tywyll Heliwr after their return to Oasis Station.  Determined to get to the bottom of who Tywyll Heliwr is, why she was released from the Shadow Testament and if she meant Mhyra any ill will.  The Kavosi offers to help Tywyll Heliwr if she would open up to him. Tywyll Heliwr is not immediately ready to trust the Kavosi.  However, she reconsiders just before the Kavosi leaves.
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:iconMaxRoss: :iconsaysplz: The Kavosi lengthened his stride as he hurried down the hall towards the med unit. Although he’s frequented areas of the Outer Rim quite often, he knows very little about the Fetch. Having found this one seemingly ‘let go’ by the Black Coven only added to the pile of questions he had for her. It had been days since the Battle of Vortex, and yet still the Oasis teams were bringing in more and more wounded. Hours and hours of their time had be
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Apt Pupil (Roleplay Log)
Summary: Tywyll Heliwr contacted the Kavosi asking him to meet her on Bespin.  Once they met, the Kavosi witnessed Tywyll Heliwr pass samples of the Rhakghoul virus #5 to fellow Fetch.  After the Kavosi mentions training Tywyll Heliwr, one of the Fetch passes a warning to the Kavosi about the dangers of training her. After the meeting with the other Fetch is done, the Kavosi tells Tywyll Heliwr that she will come with him and answer his questions, whether he would like the answers or not.
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:iconShadowwright: :iconsaysplz: Tywyll Heliwr had been serious about laying low after delivering a portion of what she had been able to retrieve in part from the Box to Mhyra at Oasis Station. She had hitchhiked her way to Bespin on board various vessels and once there found a place from which she could broadcast an encryted message to the Kavosi. The message was limited in its content and once the encryption was broken appeared to be a letter sent by one civilian to anoth
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First Test (Roleplay Log)
Summary:  Padawan Jooniper Brown has been assigned a new Master.  Master Sebal Clive seeks out Joon at a waterfall not far from the Temple of Tython. After introductions are made, Master Sebal Clive leads Padawan Jooniper Brown into a glade in order to begin his first assessment test with his new student.
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:iconshadowwright::iconsaysplz: It was in the middle of the afternoon on Tython and Jooniper was done with classes for the remainder of the day.  Jooniper was a relatively new resident at the Temple on Tython and, aside from a mishap involving a huge mess in the archive, she was adjusting well to her new life.  Jooniper Brown had believed that it was going to take her forever to clean up the mess she made in the archive until a couple of other Padawans had shown up to help her clean things up without the Oracle's knowledge.  Now, Joon was much relieved that she could spend her free time doing something else.  After her classes, Joon had c
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Laid Low by Ill Will (Roleplay Log)
Summary:  Following right after 'Guess Who's Coming to Dinner?',  this log covers what happens when Tywyll Heliwr leaves the restaurant to track down Trageh Ilgyeth.  During the resulting conflict,  Jason Storm, an aspiring Padawan, shows up inebriated and watches the fight.  The end of the fight comes with an unexpected outcome, involving Trageh disappearing into a raging storm.
:iconLtHobbes: :iconsaysplz: Trageh stopped; the rain beating down upon his grey hood, which he had thrown up to protect himself from the rain upon exiting the cafe. Before he turned around, he could tell who it was. He turned around to face his stalker and spoke in a calm and collected voice, "I see you have chosen to ignore my warning Fetch. Maybe you consider yourself to be beyond the skill of the average sentient and I can tell that you are correct in your assumption. However, it also appears you have underestimated my own power but I assure you that if you knew who I was, then you
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Guess Who's Coming to Dinner! (Roleplay Log)
Summary:  While lying low, Tywyll Heliwr's efforts to enjoy a private peaceful meal in several quiet establishments continues to be thwarted. Each meal comes with the challenge of unwelcome guests behaving in various ways ranging from the tolerable to the obnoxious to the outright violent. When she decides that she has had enough, Tywyll Heliwr pursues her most recent intruder out into the rain.
:iconshadowwright: Within independent space was a world named Lahsbane.  Although it had been one of the first to join the Republic centuries ago, their allegiances seemed ill defined because the world was left on its own and had not developed much over the years.  The ambient spore released by the native flora that choked the engines of ships and created other problems for star faring vessels did not exactly make it the first pick for most space faring people.  The low amount of traffic to the world made Tywyll Heliwr decide that it made a good place to continue to lie low.
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SW- FOTJ: Patient Zero
Summary:  Cloaking herself with the Force (Vis),  Tywyll Heliwr snuck onto a New Order space station called the Box.  While there, she sought out 'Patient Zero' for the most recent strain of the Rhakghoul virus and any research that she might find there.  Tywyll Heliwr was able to retrieve samples of both the virus and the vaccine, though not without Sith Lord Raqut sensing her presence in his lab.  Continuing to use the Force (Vis) to cloak herself, She stunned Raqut from behind in order to escape his lab. Then, Tywyll Heliwr snuck back to the hangar bay and onto a supply ship which made a scheduled departure.  Tywyll Heliwr remained hidden on board the ship until it landed. Then she snuck off the ship and onto a different ship.  
:iconShadowwright:  Above a world of molten lava and ever erupting volcanoes hung in the sky a cylinder shaped space station, featuring a couple of wings, called 'The Box.'  There was nothing particular about this
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Jooniper Brown-FOTJ
Basic Information  ||
Name: Jooniper Brown
Nickname/Alias: The Magnificient Jooniper Brown, The Living Doll, Shatterglass
Gender: Female
Race/Species: Hapan
Current Age: 16 years old
Profession: Jedi Padawan, Jedi Investigator
Physical Information  ||
Height:  3 ft.
Weight:  31 lbs.
Appearance
    Oftentimes mistaken for a child or doll at first glance, the second look tends to remedy the misperception. She is a radiant, slender and well proportioned woman in miniature of fair complexion with entrancing silvery blue eyes and soft pink pouting lips.  Her lavish golden honey blonde hair falls down her back almost to her knees.  Her tresses are braided in a myriad of small braids and partially piled on top of her head.  Interesting enough there are shocks of color throughout her hair; blue, purple, red and teal.   Despite the outrageous colored hair, she seems to possess a cert
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The Rhakasah Heresy (Lore)
The Rhakasah Heresy
 To Whom it May Concern,
    The Rhakasah Heresy is a belief system about the Force that has surfaced out of Wild Space over the last few years, as more inhabitants from Wild Space have begun to travel within the Rim Worlds.  This heresy has found some popularity among some of the force sensitive beings living in neutral aligned space, in particular, on the Void Station.  Seeking the origin of this heresy has only led me to the mention of the Rhakasah, who seem to be an extra-galactic race.  When I have asked what the word Rhakasah means, I am told it means 'I do not know.'  I managed to pick pocket a Fetch's journals on Void station.  I had to use the Force in order to read these journals because they are not written in any language that I recognized.  Upon reading the contents, I was even further alarmed to discover that this heresy is not just a belief system but a way of practicing the Force.  This heresy
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SW FotJ: The Hell for Youth and Laughter pt. 2
Summary: Tywyll Heliwr is treated for her injuries while Mhyra Zyuneli deals with some Republic soldiers unwilling to trust the presence of her new charge.  Director Mhyra Zyuneli experiences firsthand the horrors of war for the first time. The Kavosi tries to offer words of comfort to the innocent Ulythari. When the Kavosi tries to interrogate Tywyll Heliwr, Mhyra makes him leave the med unit. Tywyll Heliwr is prepared for transport back to Oasis Station.
:iconShadowwright: Tywyll Heliwr nodded to the woman and murmured, "Thank you very much.  She dropped the Imperial uniform on the ground to show the woman her pierced palm and wrist, crusted over with something that looked the same color as mercury oxide, and one could see light passing through the injuries.  The strong wind blew some of Tywyll Heliwr hair into her face and mouth when she tried to murmur, "I am afraid that I am not... worth much....like this," Her hand shook as she moved to pull her hair
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SW FotJ: The Hell for Youth and Laughter pt.1
Summary: Tywyll Heliwr's escape pod from the Shadow Testement crash lands in the middle of a battlefield on the surface of Vortex.  Upon discovery of the escape pod, a Sith by the name of Lord Ahtaga decides to torture one of Tharax's lost pets.  The Kavosi, a former Jedi, interrupts Lord Ahtaga's plans and kills the Sith Lord.  The Kavosi escorts Tywyll Heliwr back to a Republic held camp, where The Kavosi begins to heal the wounded.  Not wanting to be taken, interrogated and kept by The Kavosi, Tywyll Heliwr asks Director Mhyra Zyuneli for Sanctuary on Oasis station.
:iconShadowwright: Once jettisonned from the Shadow Testement, the escape pod that contained the capsule that held Tywyll Heliwr in cryostasis, thrust itself into the great expanse of stars towards a destination unknown by its occupant. Sent off like some fallen hero, Tywyll slept the death of sleep frozen in some blue gelatinous goo;  her weapons and belongings added almost as an a
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SW FotJ: Prisoner 401
Summary: Tywyll Heliwr awakens to find herself restrained in a different cell with someone other than a thief for company. Tharax has chosen to give Tywyll Heliwr some of her personal attention.  While melding with Tywyll Heliwr, Tharax attempts to persuade the fetch to 'get to know her'.  After fighting Tharax's advances and defying her both mentally and physically, Tharax launches Tywyll Heliwr out into space. (Note: This log is edited of any portion that would be considered inappropriate for younger audiences in keeping with the PG-13 rating of the site).
:iconThe-Red-Right-Hand:  Drip, drip, drip … The sound was deafening compared to the silence as small droplets splashed against the damp floor as the thick condensation of the room created the insufferable dripping. The room was muggy, damp and warm and comfortable to be in. Not that Tywll had much choice, after her little escape and trip around the ship she was thrown in maximum security, her arm were b
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Just recently, I performed something that is generally viewed as a no-no. I wrote an OC for Star Wars, who is a prodigy, to actually play in a game!  Now, why is this a no-no? 

First, most people I have met think Wesley Crusher from Star Trek: The Next Generation when they hear the word prodigy and many of those same people have told me that they can not stand Wesley Crusher.  When I have asked them why they did not like the character, either they could not give me a reason or they said it was because he was so smart.

To me, 'the character wasn't dumb enough' is not a good enough reason to me not to write a Prodigy. No, I did not write this character with Wesley Crusher in mind and Tywyll Heliwr bares little resemblence to him.

Second, It is really hard to write a prodigy character who is not a Mary Sue.

So how would I avoid that second obstacle? I looked at prodigy characters and real life prodigies that people actually like.

Remember Quantum Leap?

Dr. Samuel "Sam" Beckett could do advanced calculus in his head at age 5 and by around age 24 had 6 to 7 Doctorate Degrees.  Anyone who watched the program knows that Sam was not a perfect character, that he had flaws.  The program was so well liked that you could not argue that people hated the main protagonist for being a prodigy.  For all his brilliance, could he solve every problem on his own? No!

Remember Dougie Howser, M.D.?

Alright, this one was a comedy and there is going to be some exaggeration of things involved so everyone gets their laugh. Kind of the same thing with Big Bang Theory, which really exaggerates stereotypes.  Anyways, Dougie is 14 years old when he completes Medical School. In the beginning, the other Doctors do not know what to make of Dougie or what to do with him, they think a joke has been played on them.  At the same time, Dougie Howser is just trying to do his best to interact with his colleagues. This makes a good story.

Familiar with Numb3rs?

Dr. Charlie Eppes attended University at age 13 and graduated at 16 years old. Like Dr. Samuel "Sam" Beckett, he also has several Doctorates.  Yes, the character is flawed and relating with others is sometimes difficult for the character but not impossible.  In fact, part of the running storyline is Dr. Charlie Eppes's attempts to better relate socially with others.

I am curious to know, how many here hate the series 'Davinci's Demons'?

I've known some DMs to look like they wanted to run and hide at the thought of a player having a Polymath for a PC. I saw less of this reaction after White Wolf publishing put out there Storytelling game series, which changed the way table top and online gaming on M.U.S.H.es and M.O.O.s were played.

Games like AD&D and Star Wars changed over to the D20 system in an effort to compete with a character building system that did not encourage min maxing on character sheets using some system designed for strictly villian of the weak dungeon crawls, with the repetitive cycle of gaining more treasure, equipment and powers as the constant main goal.

White Wolf's D10 system still beats the pants off of the D20 system because you get rewarded for actually role playing your character and telling a story through play with others.

I actually blame West End Games and TSR for the whole 'No, no. Anything but a polymath in the hands of a player character!' attitude that DMs have had in the past.

But these Prodigy characters are all fictional people...


Dr. Charlie Eppes's character is based off of the real life Richard Feynmon.

Well, these are all male characters and your character is female...

Look up Hedy Lamarr.  She is the reason why you can even be reading this journal entry today.  Her work laid down the foundation for the whole internet.

Now, in my personal experience... 

While attending University, I met Ilyana Mansfield. At the time, she was something like nine years old.  She was only auditing classes because either the University would not allow her to take the credited classes or her family could not afford to do so.  My experience with Ilyana Mansfield was not just one chance meeting in a University class. Ilyana Mansfield is a good friend of mine that I have known for years.

Also, I am above average intelligence. I believe that there should be great stories told about all kinds of people. That includes the really smart ones. This is not me arguing for Mary Sue characters.  Mary Sue does not make for a great story.  R.A. Salvatore's fans became annoyed when Drizzt d'urden always won his fights and never really got injured or died after more than six books.  Finally, R.A. Salvatore had Artemis Entreri kill Drizzt in a fight for that very reason. R.A. Salvatore's fans were happier once Drizzt actually had to be taken to a temple to be resurrected!

But really smart people never make mistakes and never need any body else's help!

Have you seen Doctor Who?

'It is amazing how someone so brilliant can be so thick!'
                                                                    ----Doctor Who
"Oh! I am so thick! Why didn't I see it?!
                                                                   ----The Doctor, Doctor Who

Anyways, where was I?  Oh, yes! My cardinal sin of creating a prodigy character.  I looked at qualities and flaws of prodigies both fictional and real to help me come up with Tywyll Heliwr and I hope that she is a character that others will come to love. If not love, then at least love to hate.

 

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Thank you kindly for the watch. I hope you'll keep enjoying my work as long as I keep on terrorizing dA :giggle:
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Do you have Discord?
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Yes, I do.
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so do i Whats yours?

Mine is redjack34
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