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remember when we used to play
hide and seek and laugh all day
remember when we used to say
there is nothing prettier than the light of day
remember when we used to talk
about dreams about life, when we'd take a walk
remember when, way back then
we lived to see and fall asleep to the perfect sunset
remember when, you used to smile
and the world could stop revolving,
and tears could rain down from the clouds
remember when we could barely understand
why it was fun to kiss and hold my hand
remember when we used to fly
and live our life and never cry
remember when...
we believed staring at the sun would make us blind
and being a responsible was no fun, and an awful state of mind
remember when we used to feel that way?
wondering why everyone was sad when someone passed away.
remember when we were innocent
remember when it was taken away
remembering is all we have left
remember when we used to play?
i do. i remember more than i give myself credit for. i remember everything. i just play blind/dumb to see how far you would go to take advantage of me. but not anymore...
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troubledteen16 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2005
I remember everything, and feel sorry for the rest of those who remember to, sometimes memories bring happiness, but they can also bringt alot of pain :nod:
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
alas that they do
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troubledteen16 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2005
:chainsaw: don't you hate people like that!
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
yes, i hate them with a squirly wrath
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troubledteen16 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
:nod: *diediedie* :chainsaw: :evillaugh: =P lol
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
evil
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troubledteen16 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
me no never hehe :D
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
lol could say that again
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troubledteen16 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
me no never hehe :D
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troubledteen16 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2005
me no never hehe :D
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airmega23 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2005   Writer
I like this poem. Simple, yet beautiful. Bravo
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks so much man
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airmega23 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005   Writer
Not a problem. I just hope you can check out my new piece whenever i get it fnished.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
awsome, let me know when you have them up
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airmega23 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005   Writer
Will do
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
awsome, let me know when you have them up
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
awsome, let me know when you have them up
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
awsome, let me know when you have them up
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shy-silence2009 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2005   Writer
lovely
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you
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en-eckerne Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2005
i agree.. a lot of people can probably relate to this.. i know i do.
it's a really nice poem.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much :)
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Simbelmine Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2005  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it takes crazy awful lot to make me shed a tear after reading a poem... and i almost bursted out crying when i read this.

awesome.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
that means alot to me. even though i always make girls cry. thank you so much :D im glad you enjoyed it
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IdaMiaJotta Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
:aww: that's beautiful, i think a lot of people can relate to that. I remeber being so naive and innocent, you've captured this feeling so well.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks so much ida, its nice to see you around
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks so much ida, its nice to see you around
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IdaMiaJotta Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2005
you too, it's nice too see that you've posted some work lately. :D
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
lol yea, ive been in a slump. thanks you again
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hatsnsocks Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
I enjoy the rhythm a lot but I got caught up in the line, "about a dreams about life, when we would take a walk". . . seems to have a syllable too many. I'd suggest we'd instead of we would.

My favorite lines are very easily:
"remember when, you used to smile
and the world could stop revolving"

I absolutely LOVE this feeling and it happens so seldom. These are the moments I live for and make all the semi-as-good to downright horrible things worth it.

Your imagery is much more simplistic in this piece than usual but works extremely well. Takes the reader from one image to the next and the next giving us just enough time to relate it to ourselves and move onto the next item.

I'd have to say that I prefer your more descriptive pieces. But this piece illustrates how multi-talented you are with language.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
edited and updated.. specialy that nasty about a dreams... and yes i implemented your suggestion. im very greatful for your insight and your compliments. i do have a question, what language do you speak of? it seems i spent more time trying to decipher what ive writen than it actualy takes to write something. but again, thank you and im flatered
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poisonedrose Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
'wondering why everyone was sad when someone passed away'

I think we can all relate to this poem, you've written it in such a way that it's unavoidable. Had me gripped, concentrating on every word. That line hit me the most: I remember vividly asking why people would cry, I never understood it until I was 8 and lost someone myself. I think from that moment, responsibilities took form, just from the mere experience of loss. The knowledge of human emotions.

Ah, I've rambled.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
i enjoy your rables jobie you should know. i guess we all remember, since we were all children, even if some of us were for longer periods of time, some of us for shorter. as always thank you very much for your insight
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poisonedrose Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
:cuddle:
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
:poke:
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Love-Loyalty-Friends Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005   Digital Artist
:cries: ::sniffles:: like you... i remember things... both good and bad... i wish people would just....remember how to live again././/.
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
btw thanks for the fav
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
i see...
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xxxBiATcHPrYDexxx Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
i remember... =( *tear*

BEAUTIFUL!
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe well thank you, and thanks again for the fav
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xxxBiATcHPrYDexxx Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
no problem! well deserved! *sniffle*
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
lol sniffles aye?
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xxxBiATcHPrYDexxx Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
YES! SNIFFLES!!!!! =( i dont wanna grow up...
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
you wanna be a toys r us kid?
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xxxBiATcHPrYDexxx Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
im still that! r u kidding!! =P i just dont wanna grow up grow up.. like a lil kidd again.. kuz skinned knees are easier to fix than broken hearts.. =(
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ScornedEmblem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
i dont ever remember getting having crazy vengance sex after a skinned knee
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