Wow, I'm not even sure I can really write a good critique. This work is fantastic -- the character himself doesn't have any obvious flaws. You drew his profile wonderfully (I always have trouble with profiles haha) and all the little details really make him stand out, despite the fact that he is so similar in hue to the background. You are a master with textures -- While having so many in one picture is often the killer of good pictures, you chose the right ones to put in the right places. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)" /> The coloring, though subtle is done really well. I think I'd like to see a little more glow come off of the figure, though...the flowy thing ontop of the lantern barely glows like it should and perhaps just a touch on the chin and nose would be nice, but not necessary. It just looks like the latern is too bright to be giving off so little light in those areas. Wonderful work! I fav'd it. <3
Let me say first off, very good work. There are many good points to this piece -- the idea, composition and drawing itself are all done very well. My favorite part is the face -- the perspective is accurate and the features look great. c:
However, there are a few things that bother me. First of all, her waist seems a bit too straight. As a woman, she should be slightly cinched at the waist, given her more of a curve. If you wish to keep the straight, athletic look, I'd suggest making her hips and chest narrower/smaller. Otherwise it looks a bit mixed. Secondly, I'd suggest either buying a smaller-sized pen or to start applying different pressures to your pen while inking. If you buy a smaller pen, use it for lines that are inside the main contour lines (the outermost lines that create body shape) such as the breasts, etc. Otherwise, your best bet to try to ink softly so that the lines become thinner. It just gives it a softer, more appealing appearance imo. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)" /> Lastly, since the blood is the focal point of the picture, I think that more emphasis should be put on it. Numerous thinner, trickling lines of blood would work. That's about it though, keep up the good work!
Oh my goodness. That was so sweet, I'm almost getting a little teary eyed. ; ; That was such a lovely piece of work; I enjoyed the story, even if it was very simple. It was a little twist in the end , but I love how she overcame that and still became an artist. The artwork is lovely, the flash itself doesn't seem to have any issues, and the storytelling was adorable.
My only issue with it is the one-lined pages. Perhaps you should include a little more on those pages? I'm not saying a full-out drawing is necessary for each page -- but that perhaps there should be a little something extra in there to make the page pop and stick to one's memory better. Like a part of the background -- leaves, the grass, the tree, etc. This could also go for a lot of the negative space you have going on. While it works on some pages, on others it just makes it look like it lacks content/is empty -- some pages seem to be 70-80% white. But all in all, it's such a cute, lovely story. c: Please do more! I can't think of anything else to critique, and even this is trivial.
This piece is stunning. While its very graphic and has a lot of textures going on, it doesn't overwhelm the viewer, which I appreciate. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)" /> I lovee her face, and the lineart for her hair is beautifully rendered; while it is a still image, you really get the feeling that the hair is moving. Her stare is captivating and her smile serene. The earthy tones really ground it and there's really little I can find to actually critique.
The only thing I can really say is that I wish that big green cloud/blob thing that covers part of her head were smaller. It's a touch distracting; at least a little less bulbous. Also I think that the accent color of bright orange would of been a nice touch to use in a small amount elsewhere c: Perhaps towards the top. Hope this helps! This picture is all in all lovely.
Alright, I'm going to go ahead and expand on my comment given that I didn't notice the option was opened beforehand.
The image is beautifully rendered. The colors work exceedingly well together despite the contrast between colors, and the cellshading is fantastic. The shadows hit all the right places and are neither too light nor too dark, which is often a problem in cell-shaded pictures. The background adds depth to the image and, while it adds loads of eyecatching detail, it doesn't overwhelm the characters. The expressions and body language also are spot-on. While they are drawn stylistically, they look really natural. I also really like the flow of their clothing! Details like that are what create a great picture.
What Needs to Be Worked On
There isn't much that I can say. For starters, I feel like the angle of the red girl's torso and her lower half are at odds. While the lower half of her body seem to indict that she's in a nearly complete rear view, her top half seems to indict that she's rather only half way there. I think the placement of the arms is causing this. They need to be shifted so that they are placed in front of the chest, not beside it.
Secondly, is it just me or are they just too many windows on the buildings to be plausible? XD While it adds even more detail to the picture, I feel that each window should be larger. Then the number of windows should dwindle a little.
Overall this is a beautiful image. I really, really like it!