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You'll always come back to me
when the lights in the far hills
are done searching. For, new beds

entice adventurers. Too,
when the lights in the far hills
come home, the homespun dream they

entice adventurers too,
but they can't. (Dream we're neither.
Come home.) The homespun dream they

turn pioneers to homebodies,
but they can't dream we're neither,
our wanderlust fit to turn

pioneers to homebodies.
We've always made love free, so
our wanderlust fit. To

turn ourselves towards our home
we've always made love. Free. So
when the last adventurers

turn themselves toward their homes
in faraway lands, I know,
when the last adventurers

are done searching for new beds
in faraway lands, I know
you'll always come back to me.
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Given 2012-11-22
Come Home: A Pantoum by ~sandzen is a wonderful exploration of form to express the writer's love for their significant other for an anniversary. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
:worship: Hello! This wonderful piece of yours has been featured here: [link]
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
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haijinik Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Student Writer
erm...pantoums are traditionally written with four line stanzas and interweaving refrained lines. otherwise, nice work.
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haijinik Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Student Writer
i completely agree with you about the evolution of poetry! i have developed several forms from already existing forms. but i want there to be a delineation between the standard forms and the 'mutants' (i mean that in a good way). when i have time i will set up an experimental folder for fff (i need to do a sijo folder too).
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Hey-Ocean Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Indeed you did invent a new form of pantoum. It's cool though
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Hey-Ocean Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
Claim "poetic licence" =]
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Hey-Ocean Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
That last sentence...the part where I'm right...could you maybe put that down in writing, sign it, and mail it to my boyfriend?
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Hey-Ocean Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
My mother would roll over in her grave if I got a tattoo
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. :)
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MissLunaRose Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have never read such a beautiful pantoum! Wow. You are a master with words.

I'd like to show this to my creative writing teacher, if you don't mind. :D
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MissLunaRose Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :huggle:

I just e-mailed my teacher with the link, and (hopefully) he'll show it to the class!

It's really cool that you've lectured at English and creative writing classes; I wish that I could hear you. :) I have to agree that creative writing classes are some of the best places ever. This is my first year taking a creative writing class, and the energy is incredible!
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
:la: Congrats on the daily deviation!
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
:huggle: You're welcome!
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
:faint: A wonderful example of a pantoum -
congratulations! :+fav:
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is masterful use of the form. I loved reading this.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
This is the best pantoum I've ever seen.
Have you tried writing a sestina? If you could pull that off too...well, fuck.

As you can see I'm at a bit of a loss for words. Here exists a pantoum, and, well, it's good, and it's beautiful. Unbelievable.

This is the most deserving DD. You are deserving of a gold medal, or a nebula.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012
Let's hope so! I'm really sorry for the late reply - a whole book of pantoums! I really admire your ambition, sadly from afar, with playing around with the fixed form - I've never been able to give it the attention it deserves. There will be a time and a place.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Yes, true true... free verse is sometimes more difficult because the musicality of the piece must arise spontaneously from the words themselves. It's a blessing and a curse.
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Hey-Ocean Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Villanelles really fucking hurt.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
I've always wanted to try writing one... never have. Too intimidating!
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Hey-Ocean Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
I can't seem to get one out
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Lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day! : )
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Lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
My pleasure (and thank you) :happybounce:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Congratulations on your D.D! Well Done...
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Parsat Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012   Writer
The technical virtuosity of this piece cannot be understated.
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Parsat Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   Writer
Yeah, I've tried my hand before...definitely a challenge in its own!
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StreakBrony Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Great poem!
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